Sorrows may cut and bruse
push your buttons, lite your fuse
cut through flesh and bone too
the organs, until your face is blue
No air from your lungs, your done
Your songs been sung, no tomorrow's sun
Because you gave up, cause ya didn't take up some
Arms, alarms wring, alarming it is to fight a battle that won't be won
As the forces, move forward, and brake down your barricades
You wonder if one should be left in the chamber just in case
They overwhelm, you sweat inside your helm, salt you taste
As beads roll down your face, from this place, you just crave escape
These sorrows are like forces of evil on the offensive
You defend with all your might, that's why I take this pen in
Hand, bust off kablaam, cause I'm always battling somethen in
This place, we can't escape, so I'll fight, and smile with a grin
As I pull the pin and explode like a lyrical grenade
Smoldering rubble and ash settle, the wringing in my ears dissipates
But it's today I can't escape it consumes away
.....Reminding me.....
The concept of me being Homeless afraid that my own quarters will stray
From my hands, just like the money, that I work so hard to hold
Spent on a friends closet, fuck, is this really home?
Is this really life, am I hating what I have, for others own
A better place, better people, futures they haven't blown
I drink to much to numb, my thumb types what I feel
I smoke until I'm dumb, you all must hate my fucking shpeel
Of complaining, of the constant raining, and how I can't deal
With the fact that I'm a fuck up, who chases dreams, he can't make real
These Sorrows cut and bruse
They're pushing my buttons, they've lit my fuse
They've cut through my flesh and bone too
the organs, soon my face'll turn blue
No air reaching my lungs, I'm looking forward to when this is done
When my song is sung, and I see no tomorrow's sun
Your realy fed up at this
Your realy fed up at this poem and just fed up of battling with life. Maybe you want to choose smaller goals, attainable goals, then not so much grief. I like your choice of words in general but the mood of the poem is full of exploding negative emotions.
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