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Just havin fun my name is michael
spin thru these words like a cycle
cogs spinnin like theres a motor in my vital
viral
might be my only hope its
hopeless, to just cope with
life as i know it
gotta blow up and show this
skill my will and my passion
for graspin, my dream need to just take it witout askin
be slashin, all competition
and fuck any negativity i am givin
cause im livin, with this hunger to fill my challace
need ta blow up gotta dream like c. wallace
wanna ball its whatever u call it
im tryin to live in the fast lane by my rides stallin
not stalin, im no dictator
just a pot head, habitual procrastinator
inteligent and lazy, sane and kinda craZy
been feelin like two different people lately
on the verge of insanity
implanted in me
but were all nuts can u see
that the norm is an impossibility
we just concealin thee
real person imprisoned in our mentality
our physical being a false reality
i forget my image tryin to achieve a enlightened morality
everyones got there own troubles
and it doubles with the added rubble
that our fellow humans tumble
and shovel onto our shoulers
it all just grows as we grow older
freezing our heart and icing over
makin us colder, guess thats the meaning of ice age
i dont neccesarily wanna be rich, just moraly paid
you know this is a great
you know this is a great piece but I for me and my taste only mind you would cut the gangster rap *(for want of a better word) influence and write the full words and it will give it a sense of power that the current rant doent allow it to achieve that full bodied effect. that couple of lines are just awesome! seriously, a very good poem that has the potential to become very poignant if approached in the write way ;) a little pun there! I can definately see soem excellent work in there! congrats Cheers SS
Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS
"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."
thank you for the compliment
thank you for the compliment and the opinion. i wouldnt call it gangsta rap, i just shorten words to fit where and when i need them. as much as i used to think rap was terrible it is just poetry, to a beat, but poetry non the less.
its what ur saying that counts not how its delivered
no, no, i wouldnt either I
no, no, i wouldnt either I was just haing it up, my point was that it was a very powerful poem and that it didnt need to stick to a scheme or a beat because my preference would be to enjoy the words in their entirety and let the power of the write come through with a slower and powerful cadence. I actually LOVE rap, and write with a group of friends very much social political rap, hip hop and all master sampled works! I was being affectionate when calling it gansta rap cause I love the fact like my rants they are real but also can be very powerful and intelectual statements which I am saying yours is but could for me (my preference only for this awesome work) be even more powerful with out the shortened words which I also use when I want a faster tempo :) either way I think it is great!
Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS
"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."
oh i understand i see where
oh i understand i see where ur coming from. thank u for ur thoughts i will defiantely take them into mind