If Jesus died for my sins
Then I suppose I owe it to him
To keep on sinning.
If you raised me to honor you
Then I guess I need to honor your example.
She had no underwear on, and a shirt
That advertised her chest.
I could see between her legs
How they seemed to fall inside of her
To be absorbed by the hairless lips
I never liked it before but somehow
She was alluring me and didn’t realize it
She was just happy to be naked
She had the shirt on almost to emphasize it
Because shouldn’t be anymore naked
With golden brown skin
That looked like warmth.
She had been so loyal to him
And now she was ready to fuck someone else
After the blows and the pain
She couldn’t even leave him
She was just hoping he wouldn’t let her
Fuck someone else.
I can already see her crying when we are done
She is too vulnerable.
I’m fingering her and tasting it
I am licking inside and feeling that warmth on my tongue
Because I don’t really like the taste.
I am making her moan and its making me hard.
I am remembering being slapped and falling down
Of wanting to learn to fight
So I wouldn’t be the one to fall down.
Of having to forgive you
Because I was too much like you
So now I’m watching others fall
And all I can hear is them moaning.
This was a total surprise! I always read poems on the main page about God or Jesus or any pertinent religious figure.
I was not expecting how this one uncoiled into some dysfunction. You wrote it in a gritty graphic fashion but in that manner it attained its own sort of beauty for this reader. If you made this up and this was not some real life experience you've quite a talent in you. If it a reflection of a real experience then I am sure writing helps you to cope with such baggage you carry. Either way, I find you from this one poem to be quite a talent and I will read more of your work and comment further at another date. Do keep sharing in the mean time though. It Would be a shame if you gave up this soon with sharing these strips you peel from your poetic soul with us here on post poems.
I just hope my critique did your piece here a recognizable justice. Sincerely pleased to have read your work, Melissa Lundeen.