The Eyes saw Survival in Doubt

Your smiling like your hugging me

I am squinting like your choking me.

Seeing me cry

As if you tolerate me

Tell me why the tears are so harsh to you.

Hold up something to my eyes

That would collapse

If you weren’t holding me.

The highways of cars

Like little blood cells

Too bereaved to be poetic

Clogged enough to pray for a heart attack

Because death is hopeful when coping with their lives.

Maybe couples could separate

Maybe virgins would grab their clitorises

As something revealing.

The bible denies something that we are

And still Jesus reaps the prayers of soulless devils.

Their silly bullshit becomes a pulse

Pumping something like blood in my dick

Stuck here shooting blanks

And this is who we are.

Strong shoulders

With dangly arms

The pubic hair

In my arm pits

Like the scalps of foreign heads buried within me.

Pulled by something strong

Though resting with something weak

And buried by the mush

Of a mirror

Which only told stories

After the eyes

Saw survival in doubt.

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Aly's picture

The first two lines got me into this poem, they were the best. I like the structure of this poem as well:)