Nothing Grand

The world is so green

And we were up late

And you mumbled all the secrets

that you loved to tell

 

That, inconsequential

Like cigarette smoke,

Hung in the muggy night

Just past your lips

 

And I listened

But frustrated

 

And I looked at you and asked

"Who are you living for?"

 

And I remembered it later

Our one-sided conversation

Many mornings and nights after

When I heard a man on the phone

Talking to a loved one,

And I shall never forget he said,

Not to me,

But directly to me:

 

"What you are attracted to

Is what has power over you."

 

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patriciajj's picture

I love the pensive realism,

I love the pensive realism, the intimate informality, the emotive undercurrent, of your words that are more powerful than anything that trumpets and struts with ornate poetics. With expert subtlety you illustrate the detachment in the relationship, reminding us at the end how those memorable words were spoken "Not to me/ But directly to me".

 

Then you hit us with that killer quote.

 

A streamlined, candid and beautiful window into the heart.

 

S74rw4rd's picture

The final two lines present

The final two lines present some profound wisdom.


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