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How I lo//##?// you

How I //∆¶π√√?// you

The idea of you

The idea of you

And it breaks

God it breaks

 

//•|∆¶¶÷//

my mind is

//®^^×%//

After

 

It was on the beach at twilight

Your hand slip-ing //€¢~π√{{?//

of mine

And I //™✓^••¶?//

//°N###//

before you, frozen

Outside of thought, outside of time

Bare feet in the sand

You //##?¶∆//

your ha.nd away

 

Give it back, give it back!

 

 

(My strength

spewing //##?//

 

of my naked palm

As blood

spe//##?//

 

wing out from a split artery)

 

When you pu.lled away

You opened me

You opened me!

Waves breaking on the shore

A wet, unmetered rhythm:

"I don't //%##?//yo.  u   anym or   e"

 

 

Author's Notes/Comments: 

Experimental, trying to convey the onomatopoeia of technology, like a computer crashing

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patriciajj's picture

Amazing. You combined the

Amazing. You combined the best of whispering, graceful word-pirouettes with bold, avant-garde visual statements. I would say that your experiment was a raging success. Applause!

 
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I do not have sufficient

I do not have sufficient words to praise the beauty of this poem, and the brilliance of its presentation on the screen/page.  Wonderful!


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