Outside Alone

Outside in the woods,

Where there is lonlynest,

No one is in the woods,

 

The wind blows,

The trees move

as the wind blows,

 

You can hear your

feet step,

You can hear

many thing,

 

You can see alot

of leafs as they fall

down into the ground,

 

You can hear thunder

storm (POW!!!)

 

No one is out in

The lonelynest woods

Not even a bird.

You are out side alone

Author's Notes/Comments: 

Hello, this is my first poem made and I hope you like it. I am only 13 years old and my goal is become famus. Many people told me that it was not a good idea, but I did not give up and I will never give up.

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Push yourself

 Hello,I am 16 years old. Being that you are only 13 I think you are on the right track. I am in English honors, and number 1 in my school in speech so I know all about good poems. I think that this could use a little touch up, but your thought is very precise. Never let anybody tell you that you can't achieve your dream that is bull. The sky is the limit, and you can be anything you please as long as you set your mind to it. Feel free to go on my page, and/or message me. I am always willing to help out with any edits or anything. 

 

 

    Dream On & Continue writing. 


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