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Lost In Your Blue Ocean Eyes

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January 2004 Poetry

I can only dream of the day,

I see your sweet face,

and stare into,

your blue ocean eyes.

I want to get lost in them,

swim in your love,

and never be found.

Just a glance,

makes my heart skip a beat.

You take my breath away,

so take me away.

I want to get lost forever,

in your blue ocean eyes.



~*~ Jill ~*~

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I wrote this on 1-5-04. I actually like this poem.

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last updated 12 October 2010 - 12:56am
©6 January 2004 - 6:17am — hccgirl04
22 March 2004 - 9:02pm — Datong Liu (not verified)
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I think "you take my breath away" is a little to cliche for this poem... Your poems are too original to stoop down to using love poem cliches...

-tom

22 March 2004 - 9:01pm — Datong Liu (not verified)
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4 February 2004 - 4:31am — spark (not verified)
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this is beautiful, good job!

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