Hospital Stays

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2009 Poetry



Nasty nurses with empty purses,

false positives and very strong sedatives.

Sour sores, binding bandages,

bedding bunched as I continually punched.

Sleepless sleeps and faith of leaps,

with happy highs through my bloodshot eyes.

Waiting for eventual release.






Author's Notes/Comments: 


The Alliterisen (Complex and Rhyming), a form created by Udit Bhatia, is a simple seven-lined poem with a specific syllable pattern and two alliterations per line. For example: Glorious Graves, and wonderful waves. Alliteration is the succession of similar consonant sounds. They are not recognized by spelling, but rather by sounds. The syllable structure for the Complex Alliterisen is as follows:


1st line- x syllables (x=syllable count of the first line)

2nd line- x+2 syllables

3rd line- x-1 syllables

4th line- (x+2)-1 syllables

5th line- x-2 syllables

6th line- (x+2)-2 syllables

7th line- x syllables


which allows for infinite syllable sequences.

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I would rather talk about the V and the U, but hospitals and what it represents, I will stay away, while I can,hahah, be well.