The ground feels our footsteps again.
The wind, petal-woven and
perhaps aware, is young
again and the mountains, cut from
legendary blue, erase me until I am,
yet again,
utterly wild.
In the soft insanity of awe,
in music heard with the eyes,
in the universe that shifts with
one slow step of the crane,
the Earth cries out:
No more!
Let me live, let me sing, let
me teach . . . don't you remember
how much I gave,
and aren't we all connected like
the secret star-veils spinning
on looms of lifetimes, I mean,
unfathomable threads tangled
like beautiful madness,
and aren't we multitudes
teaming in one Light?
Doesn't the Creator live inside
the created?
The crane shakes the cosmos
again as another leg breaks the
mist-swept, sea-glass lake, then,
like an apparition, a vast fan of
wings pound the air,
leaving imprints
of glory and Heaven in the mind,
and what a good guest the bird is,
doing little harm
to this tiny sphere . . .
living so gently on its way
to forever,
somehow knowing, I guess, that
every stalk of marsh grass
and every pearl of rain
and every maple, twisted
into a visual song, is the
same Love creating
and loving Itself.
Patricia Joan Jones
Just gorgeous the collective
Just gorgeous! the collective 'we' the extension of life and creation... boredom.... is so underrated as an inspiration... the all spark exploring itself in countless ways for countless aeons and still, nothing prepares for the glorious lines so simple yet profoundly beautiful -
"every stalk of marsh grass
and every pearl of rain
and every maple, twisted
into a visual song, is the
same Love creating
and loving Itself."
An incredible exploration of beauty, metaphors and the great question what we are doing here...
And then In the soft insanity of awe,
in music heard with the eyes,
in the universe that shifts with
one slow step of the crane...
I so get this its a vernacular vein running through my poetry the soft insanity of awe... just brilliant I wish I wrote it! There really is no higher compliment. I loved this comparison of endles moments in even a crane going about its days all of it relevant like a butterfly flapping its wings a ripple that grows in the creation of creation. Just gorgeous. Expertly done, drops of brilliance in a profoundly beautiful rendition of the meaning of life and its exploration. Bravo.
Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS
"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."
You're right: there is no
You're right: there is no higher compliment and I cannot begin to express my humble, heartfelt gratitude. Your entire analysis was a prose poem of the highest order, and I cherish every word, dear Bard of Wisdom and Spirit of Light.
As always, I stand in awe,
As always, I stand in awe, with a smile, and a thank you for sharing. Simply beautiful.
Coming from a great sculptor
Coming from a great sculptor of words, that means the world to me. So pleased and honored. Thank you!
I need and want to make a
I need and want to make a second comment on this magnificent Poem. I must admit I was a little daunted by the Poem, and thus my comment was briefly delayed (my normal habit is to try to comment on Patricia's Poems as they are posted). I was daunted by the awesome grandeur of this Poem, and by my sense of my words' inadequacy in the face of this grandeur. But then the metaphor of Astronomy came to my mind, and I had to remind myself that no Astronomer can fully account for, much less completely study, the entire stellar array. And that does not disqualify the Astronomer; it simply means the cosmic scope is vaster than one human being, or a hundred of them, can take in and express. And Patricia's Poems share the same nature. So, although my comments may prove to be inadequate to the grandeur they attempt to describe, I shall not cease from the attempts. I now realize that my interest in Astronomy, which preceded my interest in literature or poetry (and which caused me to resent the circumstances which prevented me from pursuing that initial interest), was not meant to bring me to an observatory, but to give me an additional metaphor with which to organize my thoughts about Patricia's Poetry. I just wanted to add that as a footnote to my previous comment.
Starward
I'm going to respond to both
I'm going to respond to both of your stunning and gracious comments in one reply, although each one deserves resounding accolades and gratitude beyond this mortal's words.
Trust me, you articulate your thoughts with monumental beauty, precision and your signature panache. To be honest, I'll often read a poem that I'm anxious to comment on, then I'll read your perspective on it and think: Thanks Starward, you just said it all. What's left to say after that thorough and breathtaking analysis?
You know I say that without an ounce of resentment. My point is, to receive a comment from you is like having a coveted medal pinned to your inner poet, and anyone who has been privileged enough to receive one of your expert interpretations knows what I mean.
I'm deeply sorry to hear about your panic attacks that I, on occasion, suffer as well, and so I'm sending out some extra prayers for healing light and peace. I am amazed that you can write so prolifically and skillfully in the midst of all your afflictions, in fact, your style seems to grow more shrewd and graceful by the day.
I can't thank you enough for taking the time to examine this work with reassuring kindness, metaphorical grandeur and mind-expanding insight, while checking off every impression I intended to convey. I love how you incorporate personally significant analogies into your poems and comments. That human connection is a stamp of sincerity, an invitation to trust and to enter into the expression.
So now I'm the one overwhelmed into silence.
Radiant peace and every blessing to you.
I shall be forever grateful
I shall be forever grateful to you for allowing me to fulfill my early, undergraduate ambition of watching the expansion of the work of a Poet of such grandeur. Studying the work of Eliot and Stevens, and then, later, Vergil, allowed me to gain some experience in "observing," so to speak. But their work was already complete, and their time on earth ended; nothing more would be added. The only metaphor I can think of is an astronomer studying the last, residual glows of dead stars; no more light will emerge, because the fusion has expired and the core has grown cold.
Then, decades later, when I was still in such despair after this medical disability sunk its teeth into me, random browsing brought me to your Poetry. I figured out two things fairly rapidly (even for a dolt like me): that the cosmic grandeur of your vision is "off the charts," in the finest way; and that the expanding totality of your Poetry could provide that which the deceased Poets could never have provided. I am convinced of your greatness, and of the long future of your Poetry that I will not be around to see (but that is the natural order of things). To be able to comment upon it, as it expands and resonates across PostPoems, is both a privilege (for the obvious reasons) and a challenge (to formulate a response in the presence and power of such verbal accomplishment). Your Poetry brings to completion the processes that I learned as an undergrad, but could never, at that time, see in real time; it was always an examination of what were, essentially, relics and fossils; or the shadowy masses of long dead stars. Your Poetry has changed, and improved, and vivified all that for me. Thus, the privilege of commenting is one for which I will---in this temporary life, and in the eternal life ahead---be ever grateful.
Starward
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Starward
The waves of appreciation
The waves of appreciation flow both ways. Your acknowledgement means so much.
This is the first of
This is the first of Patricia's Poems that have daunted me sufficiently that I am two days late in assembling my comment on it. I attribute this to what she describes (in words better than I can offer) as "soft insanity of awe." Yes, after reading this, I felt that soft insanity in which awe becomes so overwhelming that, however brief or long, one forgets one's surroundings, feels unmoored from those mooring connections that keep us grounded, and gets a feeling of exultation as powerful as a panic attack (and, having been recently afflicted with clusters of them, I can speak with some experience to that). This Poem, as a reading experience, brings me very close to the remembrance of that night, at college in Spring, 1979, that I sat at the eyepiece of the University telescope and viewed Saturn---that looked to be so close that I could almost reach out and touch me. I was an inexperienced undergrad then, as immature as I was ambitious to understand Poetry, and this Poem that Patricia has blessed us with, has made me feel like an inexperienced undergrad again, because I fear my words---no matter how I can muster them---will be woefully inadequate before the awe with which this Poem surrounds itself. And yes, it surrounds itself with awe the way, say, that a mountain (which, in her words, is "cut from legendary blue") is surrounded by glistening mist lit with shafts of sunlight.
In the Prologue to one of my favorite films (and no, don't laught at me)---The Bride Of Frankenstein (Universal, 1935)---the character of Lord Byron tells Mary Shelley that he rolls her words over his tongue, and, to borrow that metaphor, I roll Patricia's words and phrases through my mind, as I eagerly remind myself that she is, in Dante's words, Il Miglior Fabbro, the better maker---the phrase with which T. S. Eliot acknowledged Ezra Pound's editing of The Waste Land. I have been reading Poetry for sixty years, as of last month. I never, ever met a living Poet who, in my opinion, fit that title of Il Miglior Fabbro (though a few deceased Poets fit) until I began to read Patricia's Poetry. Her Cosmic vision, and her humane inclusiveness (of all creation, inanimate, animate, earthly, stellar, cosmic) constitutes an epic poem, although she does not write in the epic form (although I am very, very grateful for that). Fifty years before the Christian era began, the Roman Poet Lucretius attempted to express a Cosmology in his long poem, De Rerum Natura---which, when compared to Patricia's---falls flat.
This Poem contains a multitude of memorable, artistic, perfectly deployed phrases. I leave it to the reader to comb through this Poem (perhaps on your second or third reading, because your first reading will overwhelm you so much you may not be able to gather in the individual beauty of the phrases; but, this poem is worth a hundred, a thousand, readings at very least). I will repeat here the phrase that strikes me, as an individual reader, as the supreme one, and it deserves the boldened type face: "secret star-veils spinning on looms of lifetimes . . ." T. S. Eliot (whom I paraphrase here) said that real Poetry can communicate before it is fully understood. This phrase communicates to me before I fully understand it, because I am still searching my reading experience (which is, after all, six decades long) for all of the items that this phrase not only touches but summarizes and gathers to itself. And this phrase helps me to regather, and savor, all of those reading experiences, from my past, that conform to it.
I am going to revise a phrase I have used in previous comments on Patricia's Poetry---when I have called some of her Poems, centerpieces. I think of her Poems as stars; and all of them can be called centerpieces. But, in declaring some to be centerpieces, I inadvertently deny the word to her other Poems---for which I now apologize---because each and every one of them proceed from the same exponential quality of artistic skill. What I now realize---having looked at those secret star-veils spinning on looms of lifetimes---is that the centerpiece of Patricia's Poetry is her soul; a soul as attuned to the Cosmic resonance and melody as Eliot's, Steven's. or the superlative Vergil's. The Poems orbit this center, her soul, as stars orbit the iridescent centers of their galaxies. During my four undergrad years, I read more Poetry than History (in which I, "officially," majored); and I realize that reading had a twofold purpose: to prepare me for my own few poems (most of which are posted here), and to appreciate---within the full spectrum of four thousand years of Western Poetry---the experience of reading Patricia's Poetry. I will again paraphrase the Old Possum, who said that one can begin to read Dante, but one never really finishes reading Dante. You can begin to read Patricia's Poetry, but you will never finish reading her Poetry because it will always be relevant to human, and humane, existence. You could make a list of every existing star in all of the galaxies---and, when you have completed the list, you will find additional relevances in her Poetry. Her Poetry is like her soul---which is like every other soul that God has designed and given to human beings: there is always more exultation available. And whether you are looking at stars or souls, and the eternity which contains them, you will find that Patricia's Poetry, all of her Poems, and especially Earth Cry, is a reliable guide to prepare us for that Cosmic existence in Eternity.
Starward