If we could see the night sky
as it truly is,
I mean, really see it,
without the white-washing
electric moons
we think we need down here,
without the chains of desire,
we would weep,
or applaud
like the river
that laps its
trembling dramas.
The night air
would taste different:
a euphoric bitterness,
a caramel sorrow
that doesn't crush us,
but releases us.
Everything ascends
under a true dark sky
till there is
nothing
but the things above:
the captive myths
that creep and stare
and all that galloping
black fury
you could never understand
the depths of.
You wear the dark,
you are the dark,
you float, you dream.
Fantasies twirl
around your head
like chiffon ribbons,
then you enter,
like royalty,
through the gates of Orion,
all pomp and adoration,
past tiarras,
past drops of centuries
frozen in light,
past smoldering,
long-ago spheres
that initiate you
into the Society of Souls
and you believe
in the luminous hunter,
you believe in his
faithful dogs and
his never-ending pursuit
of the icy Taurus,
and you watch
delicate armies
fight soft-spoken wars
in one endless shimmer
and you believe
in some sort of heaven
because it must be heaven or
a master's inner sanctum
or embers from a vast,
prehistoric fire
seeping through the roof
of our very own world
and scattering those
crackling white legends
above, beyond and within you
and making you feel
so important,
like a gold Buddha
surrounded by temple-light,
like the honored guest
of glass kings,
like a free stallion
under a shower
of hypnotic suns.
That is,
if you could see the night sky
as it truly is.
Patricia Joan Jones
I wanted to revisit this poem
I wanted to revisit this poem because it is the first of your poems that I ever read---back on January 21 of 2020. At that time, I was still in the convalescent facility, so unsure of the immediate present and the immediate future. I knew, even at that earliest date of beginning to read your poetry, that there was a greatness to your work, a consistency as mathematically precise and elegant as planetary orbits---a greatness that, in its demonstration in your poems, allowed me to see something I had never expected in this life to see: the assembling, poem by poem, of a body of work so full of life, as well as a cosmic grandeur. I was reminded then, as now, of a compilation of essays and reviews of Wallace Srevens' poetry which, although it was brought out some years after his passing, it gathered up some of the earliest written responses to his work. As one proceeded chronologically through the book, the essays became both longer and more detailed as Stevens' own greatness unfolded across the pssage of time. As an awkward, callow, and highly inexperienced undergrad---with no more maturity than a kid in middle school---I was very frustrated that I could only read these as historical texts, rather than as new responses to the publications of the inidividual poems and collections across the range of Stevens' writing career. I began reading him in autumn of 1978, but he had passed away in 1955. I did not then realize that the processes I had studied in regard to deceased poets (Vergil, Eliot, and Pop Stevens) were like practices in a laboratory in order to learn what to look for, what to appreciate, and how to link up the various poems. (At the same time, I had also read an essay by Diane Wakoski---I forget which of her poetry books it prefaced---that suggested a knowledge of the internal links between poems was absolutely necessary to a full appreciation of those poems; and she used Stevens' work, also, as her example.)This waa the kind of reaiding that occupied my attention from the mid-seventies through the entire eighties. It seemed random at time, inchoate and chaotic; some that, eventually, I indulged only as a comfortable and comforting habit (especially as my first marriage was collapsing). I did not realize that I was being prepared for the early weeks of 2020, and my personal discovery of your magnificent work.
Like those early responses to Stevens' earliest poems, my comments were briefer than they have lately been because I was not yet as familiar with your Poetry as I wanted to be. I had never encountered a Poet like you on PostPoems; either prior to 2020 or since. The unique quality of your poems was already apparent, although I was not able to articulate it in the way that I wanted . . . yet. But, as you continued to expand the significance of your poetic vision, my comments also began to expand---because, with each successive poem, there was more to see not just in the new poem, but in all the poems that had preceded it, because each new poem is a different perspective on all of the poems that have come before it. Your customary line lenghts are slyly and very skillfully deceptive in a literary way: they are brief, delicately contoured, and vivacious . . . they provide your poems with a brisk pace. Yet, these delicate lines also, in their accumulation across all the poems, have formed a massive center of gravity that creates paradoxes: slender in the individual poem, but massive in the accumulation of the entire collection; welcoming, but uncompromising in the presentation of your vision; inviting but always, always, accommodating but never subservient or subkissive. Since early 2020, I have never waivered in my belief that your poems will someday be studied academically by persons far more scholarly than me (and, also, I will not likely be around to see that happen). Because they will see more of your total poetic edifice, and eventually all of it, their interpretations will be far more profound than I can produce here. And, following a pattern I saw so often in my collegiate reading, they will swerve away---sometimes radicsally---from early interpreters including me. The French poet and diplomat, Paul Claudel, once compared himself and his poetry to a signpost that pointed readers to the right path---a signpost that, in his words, could easily be forgotten once the proper directions toward the goal were established. In my comments here, I am very content to be a signpost that, later, some student, writing his or her term paper about your work, might fine useful, and might even give a footnote; but ultimately, the conclusions those readers will arrive at are---I admit, somewhat ruefully---not available to me now, because your work as a Poet is not done . . . nowhere near being done. Now matter how accomplished your Poetry is right now, its task is not finished in any way, And if I may close with an astronomical simile, most of us here are like backyward astronomers who stay up late on weekend nights, or nights before holidays, with our telescope set up on the back lawn where we can get that very unusual glimpse of the moon. But your Poetry is like the JWT---and the vastness of the gaxe it can accomplish means there will be a lot more forthcoming. A whole lot more.
Starward
Thank you for that stellar,
Thank you for that stellar, surprise pop-in. There's so much I want to express right now, but I'm terribly ill and can hardly cobble together a coherent thought. But your shining gift at my doorstep today has made all the difference. God bless you!
"Soft-spoken wars"
"you wear the dark,
you are the dark,
you float..."
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Your "delicate armies" of stars continue a long chronical of ways to not just view, but experience stars. Orion (pronounced oorian) is a fav constellation of mine since age 8-9. Cass is my other fav.
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~A~
I can't tell you how much
I can't tell you how much your support and appreciation means to me. Thank you again and again.
As a lifelong stargazer you must have noticed that the stars are fading as the years go by. One third the world (And 80% of Americans) can no longer see the Milky Way because of light pollution. This poem is a elegy for what we have lost.
Always an honor when a great talent stops by.
I just wanted you to know
I just wanted you to know that I kept this poem open in my browser, and each time that the medicine caused me to doze off, I woke later to this poem in front of me. Now that's real therapy, to wake up to Gates Of Orion twice. I have been twice blessed today, the eve of Orthodox Palm Sunday.
Starward
Thank you again and again for
Thank you again and again for letting me know how much my work has helped you. Few things could be more fulfilling. More than a few of my poems would have never seen the light of day without your encouragement, so I owe you a great debt of gratitude. Be well.
In October, 1978, the Poet,
In October, 1978, the Poet, Dara Weir, upon learning that I had spent two years studying T.S. Eliot recommended Wallace Stevens, a poet I had studiously avoided, with the words, "He makes you work, but he pays you back." I have not stopped reading Stevens since that day. I never thought I would ever meet his equal alive, and not only alive but building a cosmic body of work before my astounded eyes. That Poet is you, Patricia. This poem was my introduction to the cosmic vision that informs and inspire your Poems. This poem will always have a special place in my heart, right up there with Eliot's Ash Wednesday and Stevens' Le Monocle De Mon Oncle. This poem ushered me into your presence, and one always remembers the first time they encountered a dynamic presence. So, visiting to determine the date of my first reading, I just had to read it again. I am again hospitalized, and the dope they give me is about to kick in and I will kick back, but before that happens, I just need to record my visit. OK, in the middle of this comment, I dozed off, so I need to go "be high" for a little while, until the pain dies. Thank you for this magnificent entrance into your Poetry.
Starward
I'm deeply troubled that
I'm deeply troubled that you're back in the hospital. I hope to hear you'll be released soon.
Thank YOU for inviting me along on your own creative journey and allowing me to see a higher perspective through your eyes. I'm certain that your powerful and crucial poetry will make a difference in peoples' lives.
May God shower you with every blessing for all you do for others.
I like the way certain places
I like the way certain places become associated with Poets, and that association is proof that the Poet has "arrived" so to speak, where even geography reminds a reader of some favorite lines, or a favored poem. In Camden, one thinks of Whitman; in Pisa, of the greatest of Pound's Cantos; one cannot drive through New Haven without a thought for one of Wallace Stevens' "ordinary evenings." And no one sees the remote village of East Coker from the window of a train car without thinking that is the point of origin of the Eliot family---a fact made so poetically vivid in the poem of a former bank clerk who had a way with words.
Starward
I am almost brought to tears
I am almost brought to tears by the sincere splendor of your latest review. I hope and pray that you will, likewise, one day know the impact of your writings (comments as well as poems) on all those privileged enough to read them. May God reveal the joy you brought into so many lives.
Although several places come to mind when I think about your poems, from your grandmother's patch of Heaven to a distinguished grave in Rhode Island, I believe what stands out is a ranch house at the end of a cul de sac in a rural neighborhood in Ohio, frozen in time and immortalized in your heart.
Thank you eternally for this resplendent tribute. You made all the difference.
Thank you for saying so.
Thank you for saying so. Your poems reach me at a level I have not felt since those two Octobers---1976 and 1978---when I was directed to read Eliot and Stevens. And, since that time, theirs is the only poetry I read addictively. Oh yes, I can have an ongoing, even devout, interest in some other poets---like Vergil---but there is a poetry of the mind, and a poetry that enters the mind and goes on to nestle in the soul; and, for a time, only Old Possum and Pop Stevens had that latter effect on me.
Until spring of 2020 when I randomly browsed myself into your poetry. Until I was able to see the great processes---of which I had been well taught by the scholars with whom I studied---of poetic creation very much thriving in your work. I had seen the results of those processes in the two poets I have mentioned, deceased poets who shall not expand their work further. But in your Poetry, I see the ongoing expansion. It is like astronomy, I think: one can study starlight, some of which somes from stars that have already expired, yet, because of the distance and time only the light is still flowing toward us. Or one can study sunlight, which is only seven minutes away. Both are beautiful, but sunlight is the more immediate experience, and allows for the complete thriving of the world's many lives.
Your poetry is sunlight.
Starward
Having received something of
Having received something of a shock today, I have felt shaken up all day, so I have returned to what is the finest poem on all of postpoems, and, for me personally, the centerpiece---along with Council of Stars---of all your work. This is the poem that began, and continues, my fascination with your poetic vision, your verbal talent, and your literary greatness. Seeing this poem comforts me. I have placed several comments on it, and I sure do not mean to be repetitious; but I would rather attest to your poetic power once again than miss an opportunity. Today, as I thought back across almost two decades of membership at postpoems, I tried to think of a poet here whose Poetry as meant as much as yours---and that thought always comes back to your poems.
Starward
I'm truly sorry to hear you
I'm truly sorry to hear you had a harrowing day. With all the joy you brought to others, you deserve only the best. Knowing my poetry helped in some way is the greatest reward and perhaps the most important reason for writing. A thousand more thank-you's for your very valuable and unwavering support. Blessings.
I apologize for my delay in
I apologize for my delay in acknowledging, and thanking you for, this very gracious reply. The shock of yesterday has slowly dissipated, and things are more quietly normal. Though it may have seemed like a tempst in a teapot, the subjective impact was like that day after Thanksgiving, 2019, when I woke to find myself paralysed from the waist down---and no one yet able to adequately explain what happened. Thank you for putting up with me.
Starward
I'm happy to "put up" with
I'm happy to "put up" with all your kindness, encouragement and talent. I'm pleased you're feeling better.
I visited this poem again,
I visited this poem again, after listening to Rutger Hauer's character's final monologue at the end of Blade Runner; in my mind, this poem stands as a great answer to that monologue. But what the character, Roy, believes will be lost in time, you have preserved in this poem, and in your others. Time is a river; and a river is what it is, neither good nor bad, just flowing, but the good or bad arise from what people make of it. The river inspires us to make boats, so that we can navigate it, convey people and goods upon it, or just go out for an afternoon off fishing, Your poems are like boats on the river of time; they use its currents, its channel, and the landmarks along its edges to convey us along our journey.
Starward
That was a gorgeous and
That was a gorgeous and accurate analogy. Thank you for your support and wisdom.
think if we were there it
think if we were there it would overwhelm us with it`s beauty
ron parrish
Thank you for reading and
Thank you for reading and leaving such a thought-provoking comment.
you`re welcome
you`re welcome
ron parrish
What is this!
Beautiful writing is what. Enjoyed
You honor me with your
You honor me with your presence, dear poet. Thank you for your encouraging feedback.
Just had ti revisit this one
Just had ti revisit this one again, and enjoy, once more, the soar of the words. And the ride is just as great now as it was the first time.
Starward
I'm thrilled that you took
I'm thrilled that you took the time to read this again and leave such encouraging comments. Many thanks.
Thanks for the reply, and I
Thanks for the reply, and I apologize for the typo in my previous comment. I am just not a good proof-reader, never have been. Anyhow, this poem is very addictive, and keeps bringing me back. The last two lines are key to one of the most powerful aspects---the cosmic aspect---of your poems: to see the night sky as it really is. In that respect, your poems are the literary equivalent of the Hubble telescope.
Starward
Wow, that was an awesome
Wow, that was an awesome comment. You have no idea what an encouragement you are. Thank you!
a true vision of gods
a true vision of gods creation
ron parrish
Thank you for that beautiful
Thank you for that beautiful feedback.
you`re welcome,i enjoy good
you`re welcome,i enjoy good writing
ron parrish
Just had to revisit this poem
Just had to revisit this poem again, I cannot seem to stay away.
Starward
Thrilled to see you back.
Thrilled to see you back. Thank you!
in one endless shimmer
you left me in awe,
a soft stroke,
with delicate lips,
spoken patiently,
i could taste the forbearance,
although,
you did not hold back.
this was beautiful.
Sincerely.
"We are, Each of us angels with only one wing, and we can only fly by embracing one another." -Luciano De Crescenzo
Thank for your very
Thank for your very insightful and eloquent feedback. I'm touched and deeply grateful.
I am rarely at a loss for
I am rarely at a loss for words, but the greatness of this poem, and your use of astronomy as an extended metaphor through the profound depth of the poem's meaning, is absolutely stunning. I have been reading poetry for almost forty-seven years, and I have rarely found poems like this one. Wow! I am going to mark this on my favorite's list so that I can revisit it easily!
Starward
Thank you for your thrilling
Thank you for your thrilling reply with such uplifting insights. I'm touched and deeply grateful. Patricia