In your shadow land
the night is way to dark,
need a helping hand
but pride makes it all to hard.
But you can't really see
to the world your completely blind,
at the light at the end
this is what you'll find.
Escape,
close your eyes and fade away,
i'ts a mistake,
you've fallen so far,
to much pain.
Never bothered to feel,
just pushed it all away,
till the feelings never came.
How much longer,
thats what I need to know,
I can not take it,
you say you care but I don't really know.
How much longer,
'till you finally see,
that finally,afterall
the antagonist wasn't me.
Heartache,
is all i'm feeling,
relize,that it's both your life
and mine that your stealing.
And I will not wait for all time,
for someone content
in living a lie.
Pretend that your happy,
thats all it will take,
for you just to see
how much longer i'll wait.
But when your alone,
you'll relize I was right,
But by then i'll be gone
you'll have lost your own fight.
Either way you'll have lost,
there's nothing to do,
there's to many things,
that you've put yourself through.
You've ruined yourself
what was left of your soul,
all for a false-image
of some real self control,
and now your alone.
This one causes thought. Its evident by your critiques. Good job and good luck!!
Excellent! good flow,sounds like a song. think about it. Keep pushingthe pen,
ChinaEyes Cook
I throughly enjoyed your poem.
Very umm...twisted lol...you switch meanings i think and i got lost for a moment
it is good though jsut jumpy i think lol
love ya always
Vicki
wow there are so many good parts i'm gonna have to come back to it when i have more time ash
Much Love
Ashley