he fixed his gaze on the tom collins glass
where water was dripping down the sides
soaking into the initialed napkin
making a ring on the bar
the ice melted and clinked
and he was reminded of her earings
and the banlges she wore around her bony wrists
and refused to take off
when she put her hand down his pants
even though they caught on the jeans
he narrowed his eyes
taking a drag off his camel
the sucking sound masked by the drum beats
from the rock radio station
and yells of the freshly turned 21 boy
who was asking for a kiss or a touch
to the made up girls
waiting for someone to buy them drinks
he flicked his cigarette
getting ash on the bar
forgeting the ash tray beside him
thinking about a time
when conversations weren't thick
with cold stares over phone cords
insulting every question and answer
he broke the cigarette between his finger
when the made up girls laughed nervously
at a joke that wasn't funny
but to a drink that was free
and he closed his eye
and drank the last of the rum and coke
faithfully set in front of him
as long as he had 3.50 ready for the next round
I like your imagery. i felt like i could see everything as it happened. nice work keep it up.
You write well, I'm impressed. That is nothing easy, because I read quite a bit, and not much impresses me, especially not new writers. Good job.
I really enjoyed that.