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She swayed
And her hands spoke as her eyes slipped
And she blew
His mind from her fingertips, smoking
The last cigarette in a pack
Of gift wrapped promises
And the highest of low slung verbs
Before everything stopped- her hands
Grasping the limp string of her
Fate and her mind
Blown.

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©14 November 2009 - 5:04am — C.Locke
26 July 2020 - 9:13am — J-C4113D
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I applaud the adroit skill

I applaud the adroit skill with which you create metaphors that are highly descriptive of emotion. 

J-Called

26 July 2020 - 8:57am — allets
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Would A Comma Hurt?

Okay, 6th read and ?'s but that worked cause I sailed on "...gift wrapped promises..." the dash and space helped to finish the one line poem. Wow! Can she write! ~S~