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Fairytale Badlands
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Truth You were the greatest love story
that never played out
arythmia of my heart
skipping your way
uniting with happiness
after led too far astray
our bodies connected
our minds on the same wave.
We never Pan'd out
We never flew away
and neverland, I'll never land and
never will a man
take my hand
with broken promises
and a predators way
to posess and lead sanity as prey
illusion and madness strays to another land
oh, wonderland,
wonder when'll be the day
no fool lost the way
and no caterpillar every packed a pipe and didn't stay
where no cat cloaks in the light today
and no Mad could ever drop the hand
of an Alice that just happened to matter to the Hatter.
Loved it all except this
Loved it all except this line:
like uniting with happiness
after led too far astray.
was clunky hard to get over needs a more seemless explanation
the poem is so good I just had to say,
please feel free to ignore me anway
Aside from my short failing
great piece well done
sorry for my railing
hugss
Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS
"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."
Good feedback, I edited it
Good feedback, I edited it for my liking too.
It seems I started a similie and then... nada.
It's updated now! TY!
I enjoyed it with and without
I enjoyed it with and without the edit. Reminded me of my own journey
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