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Overcome
I'm sinking like a stone in the sea
All i want is to break free
and to find The fire within me
I need to find the key
To break the chain's that bind
To illuminate the darkness that blinds
To reveal the signs
I must walk a fine line
Between the corrupt and the divine
The virtuous and the wicked
The righteous and the tainted
~My promises will always lye~
~I will make it~~
This poem is awesome!! I love
This poem is awesome!! I love it:):) I can really relate to these feelings..
A great read:) And for this to be your first piece, well i cant wait to read the rest!!
Good luck
Thank you!!
Thank you very much im glad you enjoyed reading it =)
First Initiation.
Fingers crossed?
We knew that you would do a great job.
You are a natural.
My favorite:
I must walk a fine line Between the corrupt and the divine
The virtuous and the wicked
The righteous and the tainted
I love this so much, because I can't walk that fine line for I am both.
Pleasant write.
Keep up the great work.
=^.^=
"We are, Each of us angels with only one wing, and we can only fly by embracing one another." -Luciano De Crescenzo
Thank you!
Im very glad you enjoyed it!
That's actually my favorite part as well haha
Take care
-Blaine
Thanks you all!
Thanks you all!
I like how you emphasized the
I like how you emphasized the last two lines with the squiggly lines (I don't know what their proper name is) Well all I can say is that I wish the first poem I ever wrote was that good. =]
Pardon my Punctuation
I was reading it and found
I was reading it and found quite a few things that are the same as my writing style. :)
I really like it. The transitions are a little shakey but seeing as this is your first poem it is boarding on amazing natural talent. My first poem I found the other day and just wanted to burn it. It was that bad.
Sorry for the babbling. It was really really good.
Love,
Watching The Living.
If your mirror doesn't find you one of the most beautiful people it has ever seen, punch it and find a better mirror.
hahaha
its fine bable all you want that's what i want =P hahaha But yeah thank you very much! I read some of you're poems there very good i liked "fell" the most!. =)
I've always wanted to write poetry but my entire life has been soooo stressful i just couldn't really ever have the clear mind to do it. well until now lol so i try to do like inspirational poems cause i can relate to it a lot
there is nothing like the
first time
this is poem is great!!
continue to to be inspired by yourself...
your talents will only grow
stay safe
be happy
peace
Dylan
"One of the best results of life, is the torment of love"
Dylan Eliot
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Thank you very much!
Great Poem!
Great Poem!
~:7]~