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He asked me not to go
So I stayed with him in the sea
Constant waves of confusion
Crashing over me
The sturdy shore beckoned
To which I fervently declines
Even in the turbulent waters
I would not leave him behind
For weeks I stood there with him
Though he offered no further direction
The shore remained loyally
Yet I offered not one affection
The weeks became cold and harsh
But my lips were free of complaint
And when he turned his back
My whisper was quite faint
I asked him not to go
But in the sea he left me to stay
I turned back to the shore to find
It had already drifted away
Yes, this is quite lovely!
Yes, this is quite lovely!
~ Becky
Elegant and beautiful, Your
Elegant and beautiful,
Your metaphor is so powerful and in the deep blue sea of unknown entities distracted like a moth to flame too afraid to move or offer a direction held captive by the sea and the ice. I just loved everything about this poem and the thoughts that sprung from them after the moments you stole from me were gone. Thanks can I have some more please?
Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS
"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."
Thank you so much for your
Thank you so much for your comment!! I didnt think anyone would like my poems let alone comment on them! haha this was a really rather deep poem for me to write that one day just came in the midst of a lot of confusion and frustration and im still not sure if im done with it but thank you for the support!
Nce! Keep writing!
Nce! Keep writing!
thank you! :)
thank you! :)