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Three I want this to be special
I want this to be great
because I will forever love you
even when you move out of state
I will think about you daily
and keep you in my prayers
call you 30 times a day
and be the one who cares
I want this to be wonderful
and words that stay in your mind
because this is the best day!
it's your birthday, Brian's day,
and you're mine....
I want this to be terrific
I want this to be unique
because you're so sweet
and you hate to drink
you're not a 'bad influence'
you're not a 'bad kid'
you influence me everyday
to be the best I can
and you always pick me up
when I'm down...
I want you to be able to tell
this apart from the rest
because to me, you will NEVER be
second best...
Now, listen to what I'm sayin'
because it's from my heart to you
I LOVE YOU, I LOVE YOU!
and 'the moon will always shine for you'.....
Interesting word choices. I felt as if you were trying to hard on this one. I wonder, what was your goal, and did you meet it? It has a lot of rhythm and a lot of meaning but the rhyme is a bit to simple. Sometimes simple is good. I liked it a lot. Keep writing for me!
Wonderful poem , keep up the great work I loved it ! take care of yorself bye !