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Two chipped swing, birds swooping overhead
that is when I left my bed
my pillows, my rest
did you think I was gonna take it good
and easy,
not a tear shed?
I was "the best"...
jumping dog, fireflies
please let me just close my eyes
hide my brain, my heart from your face
oh, your profile
strong and you scared me
chilly concrete steps
rough and scratchy as your face
but I like it that way
side-ways glance at me
on the verge of my fall
red and hot,
my face will smart
and be swollen for days to come
for days to come
my phone you won't ring
you're hiding from me...
you weren't in class Saturday
I didn't teach
so you should have come because I wouldn't
have preached to you
I would have probably walked
right
past you
and I will always remember that swing
chipped and peeling,
me, sitting in your arms and pretending
you loved me too...
I was your wife in that dream
and in your arms my tears streamed
pat my back, "everything's okay, Meagan"
you have taken it all away
in the pillows I will no longer lay
...peeling away I will have to stay gone
and I will always remember that day
when I would
fall.
wow...that's intense. I liked all of your metaphors and similies...about laying in the pillows and peeling
...there were also very creative adjectives and terms..such as "jumping dogs and fireflies"... that line definitely caught my attention. awesome poems and thanx for your comments..i really appreciated them = )
Ahhhhh! I love perfect metaphores. Very nice job on the use of the swing and it's outward appearence relating to your eventual inward feelings. You seem impressed with my poetry, but my poetry is no more impressive than yours. We see what we want to see and I see good things in you as you saw good things in he has taken away your security and forced your fall. Good people often fall far, great people fall far and in time return to were they once were, and the greatest people of all fall far but eventually rise above to and stand in a place that no one, least of all themselves, thought they could ever stand. The point is that all of us, no matter how meager nor how great, will fall. It is the greatness inside you that will determine where you end up.