Prior to, and during, the prefecture of Pontius Pilate in
Judea, an out of the way tavern in Jerusalem was often
patronized by the soldiers, clerks, and some of the
menial servants who lived in, were stationed in, or were
employed by the Fortress Antonia, which shared a wall
with the Holy Temple itself. Because the administrative
capitol of Judea was Caesarea, Pilate only visited
Jerusalem during the major Feasts---in order to quash
even the least subversive behavior, let alone a full
insurrection, which the Roman Empire feared in many of
its politically unstable and unsettle provinces, but
even more so in Judea, and in Palestine generally.
During these ostensibly administrative visits from
Prefect Pilate, his staff, additional soldiers and,
even at times, his wife, the cash receipts of the
out of the way tavern increased threefold or more;
but in between visits, revenue decreased quite
substantially---as was to be expected servicing a
minimal Roman maintenance staff. But the tavern
continued its business, with a variety of meals
available on its menu (no pork products used or
prepared there), and a variety of local vintages, as
well as---from time to time---certain Roman favorites,
such as might be supplied to the Prefect's table, or the
Tetrarch's. (Such a vintage, according to the local
gossip, had provided the Tetrarch with such a heady
exhilaration that he dared to offer half his kingdom---
which only the Emperor Tiberius could assign or
remove---to a dancing girl who had pleased him. Quite
fortunately, for the Tetrarch's sake, word of this
temporary treason (and challenge to the imperial
authority granted Tiberius by will of the Senate and the
People of Rome) was not conveyed to the Emperor's
residence on Capri, from which he administered the
majestic Imperium of Rome.
One fairly balmy afternoon, in the middle of the
week, an officer of the Temple Guard, little known to
History under his name, Ahitophel, had reason to
visit the out of the way tavern, although his nominal
devotion to his faith, as well as the oath he had
taken as an officer of the Guard should have prevented
his visit. But lust both consumed and compelled him;
lust toward a beautiful young man whose name (Ahitophel
learned, after some almost desperate inquiry) was
Neaniskos. Now you and I likely recognize Neaniskos,
not only for the Cathedral that was named for him in
Wales during the period of Celtic Christianity, but,
also, as the young man, dead in Nain (dead from a
most brutal beating inflicted upon him by bullies),
whom Jesus raised from the funeral bier because his
mother was a widow, and he was her only child. On that
horrific night when Jesus was arrested in Gethsemane (a
stealthy police action directed by the High Priest and
his staff, and carried out under Ahitophel's command)
Neaniskos had awakened from his temporary lodging
(where he had been sleeping naked, as was his adolescent
custom), wrapped a sheet around himself, and attempted to
follow his Benefactor; at which point, Ahistophel had
attempted to seize, and, indeed, wanted to rape, the
young man whose long hair, slender build, and considerable
beauty had aroused Ahitophel's long unadmitted desires.
Fortunately, for Neaniskos, he managed to flee from those
clutches, although he fled naked, his sheet being kept by
those who wanted to capture him. On the first day of the
next week, early in the morning before dawn, Neaniskos
had visited the borrowed tomb of the now crucified Jesus:
what transpired there at that time was fully known to
only a few, including Neaniskos, although rumors and
gossip were already multiplying in Jerusalem. At these
three incidents---at Nain, in Gethsemane, and in the
tomb provided by the Arimathean---we have met Neaniskos.
When Ahitophel arrived at the out of the way tavern,
he saw that Neaniskos was already seated within; and
beside him, rather than across from him, was a Roman
officer, known to Ahitophel as a centurion whom, so
said the tales already circulating, had visited the
garden tomb and knew of the strange events that had
occurred there. Entering the room, Ahistophel did not
hesitate whatsoever, but strode to that particular
table and spoke. "What brings you here, Whore? Are
"you collaborating with the Occupiers, or simply
"climbing the ranks in your own way?" The man
known to Ahitophel as a centurion slammed his
chalice down on the table's surface with such
force that the dregs of the wine he had just consumed
leaped out of it; but Neaniskos touched his arm as if to
calm his sudden anger. "I have resigned my rank and
"duties," the Roman said, barely containing the
rage in his voice, "and I will be returning to my
"house in Caesarea as a private citizen. Neaniskos
"has agreed to accompany me, and we will be leaving
"with the Prefect's entourage tomorrow morning."
Ahitophel was genuinely surprised. "Is this
"true?" he asked Neaniskos, who smiled shyly and
nodded, then said---in the gentlest of tones---"Yes."
Ahitophel then attempted to cajole Neaniskos with the
guilt of disloyalty. "This person . . . this man . . .
"represents the terrible power that enslaves and
"subjects your own people to unfair burdens and
"nearly unbearable taxes. He crucified your friend,
"Jesus, after delivering Him to be beaten and scourged."
With Neaniskos' hand still on his arm, the Roman replied,
"I neither commanded nor participated in any of
"that---but did you not deliver him to the priest, who
"then brought him to the Prefect, demanding his
"execution as one who perverted your nation?"
Ahitophel, suddenly at a loss for words, attempted to
collect his thoughts, then, feeling his mouth and
throat very dry, attempted to appeal to Neaniskos.
"I am of your race, and my nature is like yours,"
he said, somewhat more quietly than before. For the
first time that afternoon, he saw scorn rise into
Neaniskos' face, the same scorn he had observed,
however fleetingly, that night in Gethsemane.
"I am a Galilean; you are a Judean," Neaniskos
told him. "You scorn us, and look down upon us as
"inferiors. And your nature is nothing like mine."
Here, the Roman interrupted. "I ought to thrash
"you thoroughly for insulting him; but he would not
"have me retaliate as you deserve." Then, to
Neaniskos, the Roman said---very courteously, "We
"should take our leave from this establishment, as
"they are not very particular who is admitted for
"service." Neaniskos chuckled slightly; not a
girlish giggle, nor a boyish laugh---but a sound
that Ahitophel already knew that he would not
hear again. As they stood, the Roman seemed as
dignified out of uniform as in it. And, though he
was at least two and half times the age of
Neaniskos, whom Christ had raised up from death, the
young man seemed very pleased to be enjoying his
company. As they rose to leave, the Roman suddenly
slammed his fist into Ahitophel's stomach, powerfully
tumbling him to the tavern's floor and knocking the
wind from him so badly that his head spun and his
eyes momentarily lost focus; but his ears heard the
Roman say, "Be not mistaken; that was not an
"official act, only a small gesture from a private
"citizen, a citizen of Rome" Then he stepped over, and
Neaniskos stepped gingerly around, gasping Ahitophel,
officer of the Temple Guard, who never saw either
one of them again.
J-Called
Your tightly packed epics are
Your tightly packed epics are always a joy to dive into. Brief and swift compared to a short story, this poem is so emotionally intense and historically intriguing that it could be a masterclass in compressed drama with a crucial, underlying message.
Some might believe that all captivating ideas for stories woven around Biblical events have been exhausted, but leave it to you to discover an opening for a hard-hitting, deeply satisfying scene; one that fits so gracefully into the timeline that it feels authentic, compelling, very much like the narration in the excellent story you pay homage to.
While some short stories take several paragraphs to construct a believable and engaging character, I felt like I knew the genial, multidimensional, Divinely blessed yet adorably shy Neaniskos in a few lines.
But it wasn't the youth or fleeting physical attributes of the character that brought him to life, it was his soft and beautiful aura displayed in small actions such as gently touching the centurion's arm. The unforced, natural calm of one character acted as a foil for the understandable indignation of the other and together, it worked.
A deeply emotional and richly allusive micro story worthy of its monumental setting.
Thank you so much for
Thank you so much for commenting on this, and for understanding what I was trying to accomplish. This story came to me in a flurry last night, and I was up from three in the morning to almost six trying to put it together. I decided not to cite Biblical sources, as such notes might disrupt either the flow of the poem, or collide with its effect if the reader looked through any attached notes.
Your acceptance, as you know, gives the poem a full validation and I will keep it as is, without further adjustment or alteration. Thanks again for taking the time to read it and comment.
J-9th94