@ 27.055 MHz: Ad Astra; Two Young Men In Chikugo [ /;\ ]

Taking off his shoes

then his shirt is the subtle

way he likes to flirt

with you, only, who intend

to become his new boyfriend.



Kyakuchuu

aka

J-Called

Author's Notes/Comments: 

They tell me Tanka are not supposed to feature rhyme, but I wanted to try it once.

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You should try it more than

You should try it more than once. It works! The way you slipped the rhyme and rhythm into this little ember of playful seduction was sly and elegant. It a delight to read you after all this time. Rest assured that my absence is due to pressing obligations and not for lack of interest in this crucial series. 

 

Keep penning artistry and the magnificence of love. 

 

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Thank you very much for

Thank you very much for visiting the poem and for commenting.  I realize you are pressed for time right now, and I am very grateful that you made a time in your busy day to stop by.


J-Called