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If i was your girl
If i was your girl,
Would you promise to treat me right?
Nurture my needs,
Hold me through the cold night?
Cause if i was your girl,
I would always be true,
And whenever you were stuck,
I would always help you through.
If i was your girl,
Would you treat me like your queen?
Do the things i wanna do,
Even if you arent that keen?
Cause if i was your girl,
Id give you everything i could,
Always listening to your words,
Making sure your understood.
If i was your girl,
Would you wake me with a kiss?
Would we struggle to get out of bed together
And consider giving work a miss?
Cause if i was your girl,
We would always speak our crazy minds,
Listen to our favourite songs,
Rap to our favourite rhymes.
If i was your girl,
Would you save me of my pain,
I just want someone to call mine,
Someone to dance with in the summer rain.
This is adorable! I love it
This is adorable! I love it :)
"Everybody is a genuis. But if you judge a fish on it's ability to climb a tree, it will live it's whole life believing that it is stupid"
Albert Einstein
If a girl wrote this to me...
If a girl wrote this to me, I would be very very pleased....
BUT I hope that when she actually becomes my girl....I see action rather than just words
I enjoy this one also! It
I enjoy this one also! It appears as though you and I may be on the same path; in the perspective of a partner. Because well, it seems as if i'm made to be alone. I refuse to believe that.
sweet like a sweet love song!
sweet like a sweet love song!
whoever has you to hold may i
whoever has you to hold
may i be so bold
to point out the chance
of having you to dance
your life with them
walking in heaven
if theres no appreciate
or outweighed by hate
get out of dodge
they are spoiling your lot
keep a smile on that face
and keep living with grace
I like! :) SS
I like! :) SS
Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS
"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."
For me, this was a nice read
For me, this was a nice read which creates a picture of one's inner-self. However, since you've asked for constructive criticism, my main emphasis is always on sentence structure. Reread and rewrite until each sentence feels just right to you. If a word seems awkward in your sentence--throw it out--if you need, use a thesaurus and find a likened word that improves the overall appeal of the sentence.
Just my opinion, although it doesn't account for much:
Carl