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If I Could, I Most Surely Would
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Lust, Love, & Lofty Confusion If I could remember you, I would recollect your reflection
Always as an infallible perfection.
If I could embrace you, I would restart
Pulling you closer, chest-to-chest, heart-to-heart.
If I could speak to you once more, I would confess
That your glance leaves me eternally breathless.
If I could caress you, I would seize you without clandestine
Swiftly and indelibly as if it were our only moment in time.
If I could walk with you, I would walk a step ahead
Enduring every danger and distress instead.
If I could have you smile, I would give my eyes
To know that wondrous sight would forever reprise
If I could cry for you, I would obliterate the harmer,
Freeze my tears, and construct for you an icy armor.
If I could touch you, I would be left
With emptiness when no longer accompanied by your deft.
If I could hear you anew, I would merely listen
To the brimming reverberation of your speech until I fell into submission
If I could witness you happier, I would liberate you
From my reach as my heart immortally awaited for your returning rescue
And, if I could admit, to you, all of this,
Maybe, I would no longer reminisce in something that never did exist.
Nice
I read another one... "Death of Remorse" a little confusing to me but well liked by most it seems. i probably ought to expand my vocab a bit for better comprehension. In any case I liked this one much better. And although I first felt impressed to comment on your work as you had for mine, scrolling through the elegant critics and comments lovingly given, I feel slightly meager in my thought and words. I really don't have quite the maturity of mind or speech yet I think to compare to many of the other authors and readers on this site. Thanks so much for giving my poems a look at and keep up the good work :) awesome stuff
thank you very much :) and oh
thank you very much :) and oh god you're not the only one who feels meager by the comments xD.... sometimes I think peoples remarks on here are by far better than my poems ^_^.... i really do enjoy your work! and i appreciate ur honesty :)
Wow! This is so rich with
Wow! This is so rich with imagery, longing and desire. Fantastic! :)
Oh my gosh! Thank you so
Oh my gosh! Thank you so much! That means a lot from you! :)
very well written, good
very well written, good reading!!
thank you so much :)!
thank you so much :)!
This is excellent poetry...
Such a beautiful story this tells, bringing in several different emotions. Tragic in some ways, inspirational in others. The desire and longing in this poem is almost hot to the touch,at times...making this an outstanding poem on that aspect, alone. The Literary device used in the lines .....I love the second line...when spoken, it just sounds beautiful and harmonious...great assonance. Lines 13 and 14 are also excellent and really bring the emotion to a new level. The difference between a good poem and an excellent poem is making the reader feel what was in your heart, and you have done that here, without question. Truly a wonderful, beautiful poem.
:) thank you so much for your
:) thank you so much for your beautiful comment.... I'm always thrilled to receive one from you especially when it's as delightful as this one ;)
beautifully heartfelt
beautifully heartfelt lines... clearly, you wrote this with a lot of emotions. this poem literally made my day :)
specially lines 5-10 and 13-14 n d last two lines, i liked them best :)
best wishes :)
what a lovely comment...
what a lovely comment... thank you.... you made my week :)
Wow absolutely brilliant the
Wow absolutely brilliant the concept the feeling the passion to want, people loved it!
Thank you so much :)
Thank you so much :)
I Love The Length
...of this poem. A challenge of imagination and wonder. So many poems, prolific. Write On! - Just Bein' Lady A
Thank you for your
Thank you for your encouragement!! It is greatly appreciated :)