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"LOST SOULS"
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dream experiences
~ScReAm~
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No OnE
CaN HeAr YoU
SultryRose's Signatures
I lay in my bed fast a sleep
and dreaming in my head,
The nightmare is what it was
and falling down this vessal
that lead me to hell instead.
All I could see was the flames
of fire, the hands holding
out to me saying help me, help,
As I began sinking further
down this vessal.
the screams were getting louder
I became scared and a afraid.
The further I continued the
viberation was getting intence by
the second I felt helpless to there
screams and paralyzed in my thought.
Then I woke from the startling
of a sreetch that broke the vessal
of intence heat.
Lost souls is what I saw in cages
of fire and crim.
Screams of everlasting crys,
of trapped lost forgotten souls.
I lay in my bed fast a sleep (asleep)
and falling down this vessal (vessel)
I became scared and a afraid. (afraid without the a before it)
viberation was getting intence by (vibration, intense)
of a sreetch that broke the vessal (screech)
of intence heat.
Lost souls is what I saw in cages
of fire and crim. (crim? not sure what word that is? crimson or grim maybe?)
Screams of everlasting crys,(cries)
of trapped lost forgotten souls.
I would not take the time to point out typos to you if I didn't feel your poetry was absolutely wonderful and I love it and just want to help you fix them if you want to. I look forward to reading more of your poetry and if you don't want me to help out with the typos, please let me know...Pam
maybe thats why my poem caught your eye
army rec and my quiet place is religious
ron parrish
great poem,sounds like god has given you a commission
maybe thats why you are reading my oetry huh
ron parrish
a very intense powerful piece!
Great piece, I like this one