I would never be
an asset to them-
unconvertible to
something of worth.
No, I owed them
for my deficiencies.
Now, those were tangible-
noted in red markings
on my papercut skin.
I would be held liable
to repay all the debt
I had incurred-
bound by losses
that must be settled.
My insufficiency
depreciated the value
of my good intentions,
as obligations
continued to accumulate.
I would never find
an equilibrium between
interest and offense.
Earning negative equity,
I was a
wasted investment,
my purpose still
unaccounted for.
Rewrite 2012
I would never be
an asset to them
unconvertible to
something of worth.
No, I owed them
for my deficiencies.
Now, those were tangible,
noted in red markings
on my papercut skin.
I would be held liable
to repay all my debt
bound by losses
that must be settled.
My insufficiency
depreciated the value
of my good intentions,
as obligations
continued to accumulate.
I would never find
an equilibrium between
interest and unsettled dues.
Earning negative equity,
I was a
wasted investment,
my purpose still
unaccounted for.
GORGEOUS!
You have a nice way with words. I loved reading this. I read it twice just to make sure I didn't miss anything. Very simplistic and to the point no fluff or anything.
I LOVE IT!
critque some of my poems? =]