i should work out fiction
in a poem about you
i should hide behind
the sun sitting on a beach
that changes the taste
of the rum drinks and
your dance floor
i should be romantic
and bring in the struggle
of the middle class
i should be better than
the current poet laureate
who is pretty good
i should not be the center
of the poem
you should start each line not i
you should be my desire in each nuance
you should be the whisper of beauty for all to feel
in a romantic struggle of the middle class
you posses the lips that without a word
calls out pleasure
you are the end and the beginning
and the curves of the middle
you are the one more poem i write
because you are what drives me beyond fiction
you should know
you are
I have been reading poetry for over thirty-five years, and I cannot remember a love poem (among the many I have read) that struck me in exactly this way, with this intensity and with its obvious demonstration of profoundest love. This is a poem to admire, to learn from, and to envy. You have achieved greatness here, and I applaud your accomplishment.
Starward