Amethyst

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Lift me up

On Heaven’s wings

To the place I want to see

To be

Just a dream

Midsummer in autumn lyes your body with a note beside

Fourteen must have struck a cord on you

As did the note reply;

You aren’t shocked

And I’m not surprised

I hate the world today so I figured hell why not just go away?

You told me all the time how you were going to do it too

Spread your arms out wide

Think of Nothing

Close your eyes

Feel yourself floating,

Mind rid of troubles,

Your body’s an empty shell,

You stopped breathing and I believed you

But I wasn’t born to follow

Red rose petals fell a scent of rain

You took for granted that black swans never will forget carved in stone bared the name of the one whom took it all away for something more worth it than what it was before.


Author's Notes/Comments: 

Eh well it just started one day when I read my friend Sal's poem and it inspired me so that's how it came to be. Don't worry I'm not sucidal or anything the words just came to mind and I wanted it to be slightly dreamscaped to if you will.

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Jessica Amy LeBlanc's picture

Hey Tara!
This poem rocks! I have a few fave lines:
"Midsummer in autumn lyes your body with a note beside
Fourteen must have struck a cord on you"
and
"Red rose petals fell a scent of rain
You took for granted that black swans never will forget carved in stone"

Points of constructive criticism:
The last two lines could be divided up for smoother reading and it should be "who" not "whom". That's all for now! Take care and keep writing ;)

dial666's picture

I really liked this one, I'd go more into detail but I have to leave now, thanks for the comment on my poem. Haha, it was uh, one of my least favourites however...Haha.

Andy Urbats's picture

"Midsummer in autumn lyes your body with a note beside
Fourteen must have struck a cord on you
As did the note reply;
You aren’t shocked
And I’m not surprised"

I liked this best.