I once had a love from a field of spring--her love was few but her lust was many things,
She wanted many things but it wasn't love, she destroyed a heart that simply wasn't hers
But I rose above her feminine wilds--I cried then, but I smile now
I was a wild child--now I'm a calm man, love God--I'm his number one fan
I'm tired of folks that want to knife my back--grin in my face and then knock me off-track
Is it exact? My first instinct? I think not, it's been my worst instinct
And in the blink of an eye, baby wants me to think of her thighs--but here's the surprise,
I've known better--even if she stripped down and opted to shake a tailfeather
And the weather is a little rainy--that hate my size but they love my brain, see
But it doesn't pain me because I've transcended,
Doesn't even matter that I'm short, fat, and winded
House-blended--give me some vanilla, I could do this verse solo and accapella
Doesn't even matter if you're bum,prep, or thug--
I could care less about a joker's false love.
Hello, Daniel. Thank you for your critiques of my poems. Anyway, I like the way you write. I liked the rhythm of this poem. I especially liked the last line of this poem...it's very direct. Keep on writing! I'm looking forward to reading more of your poems.