If some people were to explode, even the crater would be shallow

Don't get in too deep,

just enough to quench your thirst,

satisfy your desire for a connection,

however tenuous to the event

and relieve your need to feel that you are 

part of the action, the solution, 

and perhaps,

you can even feel better about yourself,

and more comfortable and secure,

despite the fact that your safety & comfort

have always exceeded most of humanity;

and never actually existed and that thought

never crossed your level of consciousness. 

Let's pitch in to buy him a boat 

that both the government and insurance will replace 

while widows and orphans 

face a new and uncertain day, 

while loved one's grieve multiple tragedies,

lives lost or destroyed, a city terrorized,

a small town devastated;

yes, let us focus our attention 

on replacing that damn boat.

I'm certain it is a shallow draft craft.

 
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running_with_rabbits's picture

okay before I read it I have

okay before I read it I have to comment on that TITLE! I hung my mouth open it was so brillaint! it almost has me affraid to read the poem! no it DOES have me affraid to read the poem...it is so up my alley I am worried the poem cannot live up to it, or worse, surpass it and I am shell shocked and stuned for the rest of the night :)

 

so glad I set aside time for this


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Ashley

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:-D

I'm rather proud of the title, as I feel it is soooo Rabbit much a result of your influence, my Dear! The poem is a rant that may fall short of the title, HOWEVER, the fact that you have expanded my vision, my ability to create, to capture with a title, makes this a success in my eyes, even if the poem falls flat ;-)

running_with_rabbits's picture

:)

I am not sure if I could ever get across how humbled and honored I am that you of all poets aim to be more rabbits in your titles :) I am blon away my dear just blown away! 

 

Your way with words is amazing! and I wouldn't change it for the world


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Ashley

running_with_rabbits's picture

k read it..it started so

k read it..it started so strong I really enjoyed the build up but I am not sure I understand the last line and that takes away from the imopact for me

 

will read again later and see if that changes


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Ashley

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I debated including that line

I debated including that line & how many would get the implication and reference. I'll probably delete it when I get around to revising, if I do. Thanks for the feedback! Love & hugs! ;-)

running_with_rabbits's picture

:)

:)


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Ashley