I am here in extsitance ,
I need to take my wrongs
in acceptance .
And make them right ,
Give my all with every last
breath I need to fight .
Fight off these demons
that come and play
get rid of them and
what they say .
They haunt my past
and threaten my future
I need to mend my life
together with God as my suture .
Take back what is rightfully mine
something I left back in time
And stop with the all this
haveing cheese with my whine .
to me it feels like this poem
to me it feels like this poem was forced to rhyme rather than just rhyming which for me takes away the impact of the emotion. rereading it out loud might help with finding where the flow breaks and the rhymes seem forced.
and all the best in luck in becoming yourself it is a hard thing to do! and it takes very brave people to want to explore who they are and get deep down inside themself and find themselves! you rock for doing this.
Much Love
Ashley
I like the write. And, are
I like the write. And, are you having much luck with giving yourself the moral support? What are you trying to give yourself moral support over??
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Over my addiction and to
Over my addiction and to right my wrongs ...
you laugh at me because I am differant, I laugh at you because You are all the same ...(KoRn) J.D......
Oh, okay. You know, if you
Oh, okay. You know, if you ever need moral support, I'm here! =)
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I love this poem it speaks of resilience and i love these lines
I need to mend my life
together with God as my suture .
Take back what is rightfully mine
something I left back in time
this is wonderful! Brilliant write!!!
Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS
"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."
Thanks SSmoothie...
Thanks SSmoothie...
you laugh at me because I am differant, I laugh at you because You are all the same ...(KoRn) J.D......