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Circuit Burn
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2011 Lift me up
knock me down
Polish this ugly stone
and tell me it's unique
Flip the hair behind your ear
and beat that other drum
..while I'm forcefully exposed
to unrelenting animal magnetism
to unyielding electricity without an outlet
Those hands radiate total shock to the jolted
deadly to the touch
As a dim soul floating in the wind
within I wind the clock back again
and while what was wilts away
time ticks a willful current in me
direct as is absolute
a circuit burned that I cannot mend
surges wayward
with no ohms or home in sight
Time Images
"...I set the clock to wind back again..." aaaah, I love a unique time image. The long lines in the middle may be signature, but I found it annoying because the mind organizes and poets disorganize always...the poem is otherwise delectible perfection, yum...allets
nah they aren't necessarily
nah they aren't necessarily signature (I don't think I have anything signature on that note, now that I think of it hah) I kept those lines together because they are in the same realm of thought, they compliment one another...I could easily break them apart and make the work look more aesthetically pleasing but I wanted the message of those lines to remain united
the wonderful thing about poetry is that it's eternally workable, nothing is ever set in concrete..so who knows maybe i'll think of it differently at another point in my life and change it, who knows? life is random, that's why it's always exciting! thank you as always for your kind words allets :)
thank you both very much :)
thank you both very much :)
Brilliant! Just like the
Brilliant! Just like the first time I read it but as I remember electric is missing a y? Thanks for posting ;) cheers SS
Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS
"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."
Great poem!
Great title! Great writing! Loved it!