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I touch the active skin on this dance floor
Gulping one adrenaline-infused chalice after another
All cups waiting to be refilled
Lapping, lapping the surging nectar from your pores

 

Tasting the moonlight
A night of infinite possibilities
and finite motives

 

Taking all prisoners
and making no promises

 

Recklessly swapping paints -
We make artwork of ourselves -
and tell no one
of the canvas that would make O'Keefe blush

Author's Notes/Comments: 

Actually wrote the first draft of this on Valentine's Day 2012 - added a lot to it 6.1.12

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©1 June 2012 - 6:01am — deepblue
27 August 2012 - 8:11am — allets
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Subtle

~~we make artwork of ourselves~~ is a fine line. Two commas and one dash, the caps start each new line - very neatly developed way using natural stops (caesura) and line
breaks to create continuity and melodious often subtle cadences - intriguing - allets

 

 

4 June 2012 - 11:21pm — deepblue
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Thank you both very much for

Thank you both very much for your kind words :)

4 June 2012 - 8:25am — Beavis
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God poem!

I enjoyed reading this a lot!