Fix This, Asshole

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2017

Guilt.

I've felt more than my fair share...

 

A silent assassin

when my secrets leave me off kilter

and brain vacates the superficial filler

 

I look back at the decisions of yesteryear

and scorn stupid errors of youth

mourn putrid terrors of truth

and watch the love morph from cold

to indifferent

to untold

 

Even in the present,

a love that must remain

wholly in fresh chains

the sorrow leaves no clean corner to abstain

 

leading to a path with abrupt stop signs

my onerous will tormented

(confined)

 

and that my head knows

that barrier's rightfully reinforced

 

Leading me to immediate conflict

seeding me the most agonizing element of all this...

 

Nobody held my hand and brought me here

No fingers to point

no wicked pill or leafy joint

...it's all on me

 

Yes,

it's all on me...

 

Sure, others can help dig me out

but standing upon their soil leaves me doubt, and earthen debt

and I'm not in the business of judging a fuckin' smoker

when I'm feverishly choking down my own cherry red cigarette

 

this is my shortcoming

this is my rehabilitation

to alter the narrative

from pitiful mindset to self-reconciliation

 

the change starts now.

the change must start now

be accountable

no caveats, no creative rationales

no passive-aggressive pining

no excavating another gateway canal

 

I know I can persevere, here...

 

Just fix this, asshole.

Author's Notes/Comments: 

2017 and 2019

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SSmoothie's picture

Guilt that maketh the better

Guilt that maketh the better man. Live to scorn and thus live to right. Awesome write loved it before and love the rewrite cheers SS 


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."

deepblue's picture

cheers, and thank you as

cheers, and thank you as always

allets's picture

Re-Read The Re-Write

 

Rumination lives here and objective images that combined to form a matrix for staging a coup for human evolving. The imperitive to improve in spite of the barriers (self or other imposed) is the challenge for all of us. I do not smoke, do not do opiods, I owe no one tons of money,  and no one wants to kill me. There is no escaping deteriorating health - as age rolls in, we unravel. Maximizing improvement annually requires a list. 1. eat veggies and fruits only for a month, 2. read more science fiction, fight and defeat guilt at 1:40 p.m. today, et al ...like that. Anti-growth is futile! Best wishes. - allets-


 

 


 

 

deepblue's picture

I guess I better start

I guess I better start compiling said list hehe, very true.  With age comes wisdom but also more to endure...we all gotta find our own way out, at the end of the day, hopefully with the assistance of others.  Like your help with this comment :) thanks as always

SSmoothie's picture

The cure lies in many youre

The cure lies in many youre not gonna like this on a mass scale. Ironically many of the systems in place that lead people here require a silent revolution to match the silent revolution already in full swing we are trapped.. only diversity and freedoms regulated by the agreed ultimate values lines that can not be crossed  can save us . Fantastic write! I only dribble when hiven cause to think, well caused was i. Blessings Ss


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."

deepblue's picture

a warm thank you as always,

a warm thank you as always, take care :)

allets's picture

An Affirmation

A self-directive - make it better. Try, fail, get up and fix it! - love this phenominal sequence:

"watch the love morph from cold

to indifferent

to untold.." ~allets~

 


 

 

deepblue's picture

yes, I'm definitely shooting

yes, I'm definitely shooting for a heavy dose of motivation in a critical way... I know more often than not for most the constructive criticism route is more productive but it just wasn't how I was feeling at the time.  Either way, I've been feeling this guilt for a long, long time now and I am really happy to at least convey it with enough clarity to get my point across...thank you as always :)

Blackwingedbird's picture

Life is a test, sometimes, a

Life is a test, sometimes, a pop quiz by a hard assed teacher.

deepblue's picture

very true, hopefully the

very true, hopefully the motivation from everybody (including yourself) is to improve your life, one way or another.  That's what I'm striving for, at least...either way, thanks for the comment take care

Free-Spirited_Wolf's picture

Guilt can be a hard thing to

Guilt can be a hard thing to live with... 


*~Be Legendary ~ Ian Mascoe*

deepblue's picture

it certainly is, I've dealt

it certainly is, I've dealt with a couple secrets I never shared until less than a month ago when the guilt was really taking me to a dark place, and fortunately...when I confided in the people I confided in, the world didn't fall apart, and I was so relieved...but then I felt I put a burden on them, too.  So this one's been complex to put down on paper, I've been tinkering with it for a couple days now and can't quite seem to hit the nail on the head with what I'm trying to convey...it'll get there...but either way, thank you for the feedback. 

 

Free-Spirited_Wolf's picture

The poem is still good....

The poem is still good.... Sometimes,  it's hard to get a poem to come out the way you want it too.  


*~Be Legendary ~ Ian Mascoe*

deepblue's picture

thank you very much, I'm sure

thank you very much, I'm sure if I keep chipping away at it I'll be happier with it eventually...all part of the writing process sometimes, thanks again