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Forgotten
When I look at you it's like the world
Stops spinning around
When we talk it's like your voice is
The World's Greatest Sound
But when you touch me it seems like
I'm just your play toy
And now I'm thrown in the corner Forgotten
First of all...
Nice poem! Its really interesting - by itself, the first two pairs of verses (1 & 2 and 3 & 4) don't do well on their own; but what's really fascinating is that they WORK NICELY when it all is read as a whole, the entire poem! So that's cool.
Its also interesting how that all forces one to read the poem - I find myself pausing before saying "stops spinning around" or "the world's greatest sound." That makes for good emphasis. The way you word things is also unique.
I think its a nice one, Danielle! And its deep and meaningful - and well thought out.
^___^
- Are you doing better nowadays?
(oh, and sweet profile pic... did you draw it? skills.)
Cheers,
Adam_San
i love how u analyzed the
i love how u analyzed the poem nicely done:)
an i have a way with words too lol
im doing much better now being carerful wit who im with an all:D
^_^
an my best friend/other half drew it. she is an amazing artist!
You're welcome!
And the drawing is fantastic.
Cheers,
Adam_San
its my friend's drawing ^.^
its my friend's drawing ^.^