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Alone
As the hand on the clock ticks to make time
sitting in an indefenite stare, the only thoughts are mine
emptyness and feeling alone are the feelings I feel
these are the few emotions that seem to be real
confused at a single thought on my mind
thoughts are useless, I don't know what I am trying to find
the feeling of being alone, is something I feel everyday
when anyone is around I don't want them to stay
they tell me to talk things out, to have goals and dreams
the end result is failure, nightmares, and silent screams
no suggestions or advice needed, it's nothing I control
the emptyness that I feel is like a person without a soul
Great poem. :) It was
Great poem. :) It was inspiration to a few of mine. I like the silent screams part.
The only real failure in life is not to be true to the best one knows.--Buddha
This is a great poem, i really enjoyed reading it, unlike most of the muck i've seen so far lol, you should be very proud, you managed to rhyme without destroying the poem, and its just fantastic...i only have one suggestion:
"emptyness and feeling alone are the feelings I feel" you said the word "feel" three times, and usually thats not a good thing to do...you could change it to something like:
"empty and alone are the feelings i feel" but i dunno, whatever you want...please critique my poems!! lol :) write more
Dan, you are so not alone in feeling what you wrote in this poem, man. I find that i'm constantly like that without even realizing it sometimes. Life sucks, and this poem seems to be a result of it. I love how well it was written, and , were it a rap, it would flow like no other. Good writing, man.
Your not alone, I've sit a many times, Thinking of ways to end my life, Most times i loose my sight, I black out, I bleed black tears, For nightmares haunt me every night.
Trust me your are not alone actually u are very far from alone. I feel this way various times..and this is a wonderful poem for others that feel the same way you do and with this poem the road to failure is very far.
Very Very Very Very Good :)
i relate.
very mind provoking, i hope i can see more authors that write like you.
Excellent , well written poem I loved It I give you a 10 , you're not Alone Dan just know that God is always with you and he's always there you just gotta look for him , talk to him and you wont feel alone anymore . I've felt alone sometimes but I only feel like that when I'm mad and when I'm mad i dont like praying to God I wrote a poem for it called
" Loneliness " you can go check it out whenever you want . And I hope you dont feel alone anymore keep up your good work you have a very special talent for writting ! :) Take Care
Dan - This is a wonderful poem. Very well written, you express emotions very well. Hope to see more on the page soon.
Martina
I think everyone feels this way sometimes, If you want to read my poem "All Alone", it doesn't quite go in depth but what the hay? :) see ya
oh my god. you just descibed me! i feel exactly the same way as you stated in your poem!
Very insightful writing. You ask if anyone else feels this way does that mean I am not alone... Well It seems to me that this question is on a spiritual plain or it is a concept in contemplation by yourself. Your level of awareness is mature. Concidering, that we are alone within ourself but are apart of a collective consciousness. I am alone and so are you but we are a fraction of a whole. Please share more. Thanks
Great poem. I love it. Shows a great deal of emotion. If you have more poetry you should post it cause you are a great writer. It is nice to know that someone does feel the same way as you, it makes you feel like you're not alone in the world. E-mail me anytime. I know I don't know you, but I have an open ear that's ready to listen anytime. :-)
~*~ Jill ~*~
alright, im pretty much going to say the same thing as everyone else. this poem touched me because i feel this way QUITE frequently and its a bitch. your use of words is perfect and the flow smooth, keep it up. youre a real example of talent. you can always email me or just check out some of my poems, something tells me youd relate to a few of them. im out...ryss
Yeah, I've been there before and visit often. In a crowded
room....it's much worse. When someone has the gall to tell you
they love you and stabs your back at the same time.....I feel
it. You look in a mirror and see nothing....maybe a sneer
here and there. Talk things out.....with whom?? No trust
is a constant companion to loneliness. But, I try, everyday,
to find something new I can relate to even if it's depressing.
That make any sense? Hang in there, you. =O) It's always
easier to kick everyone out of your life than it is to keep
them in it. Funny how that works.
I think everybody feels this way sometimes. I like your use of rhyming words. If you know how, I think this would make a very nice song. Keep on writing!
You are definately not alone... great piece... I really enjoyed it. Naomi
Hun, your definitely not alone, I wrote a poem based on the same thing feeling alone and unwanted, Titled "Alone" check it out if ya want, this is very well writen!! good job!
Hey, I know how you feel. I went through something like that a couple of years ago, and I couldn't stand it, I didn't know what to do. If you ever want to talk, email me. I know how you feel, and I would love to talk to you whenever, just email me! :)
Certainly many people can relate. You should be writing more...this is quite good. malc.
beautiful
woops...my link of my poems didn't work but this one should...hehe sorry!
Dan, You are not alone. I feel this way everyday myself. It's as if it's a disease crawling through my skin, traveling through my veins. It never goes away...this feeling. At times I wish I had help...but what use would that be? I am new here...maybe you'll see some of my work. I hope to see some more of your creations...keep up the good work
Hi I like your poem! Sara
This is a very powerfull poem and I really like it The words you use I think are perfect and you have expressed what you wanted to say in my oppinion very well Keep up the good work!! Shaz
a journey within your self will always reveal more of oneself and bring peace within. You have a passionate way of saying it....
I really enjoyed your poem, it was mornfull, but beautiful at the same time, you are not alone in your feelings, they do pass, there will be moments of happiness.
I personally can relate to your poem, quit a few times in my life. I think that your poem is touching, and you sould write more.
It's strange,but it's like we're all alone,yet we're not alone,you know? I mean,we're alone in our words,actions,and feelings,which makes us individuals.Yet,at the same time,nothing has never been said,done,or felt at least once before. I guess the best solution is just to find people-however few and far between they may seem to be-who actually feel the same way you do,and understand what you're trying to do or say.It worked for me.
hey man, dont feel bad this poem speaks the truth and you are not alone out there. there will always be someone there for ya so keep writing cause i love them. peace out later marlie
FOCUS, all things are temporary pleasure and pain. Geneva
I feel exactly what you are writting here. The bitter misery of feeling alone, wanting something or someone in your life, yet when people come around all you want to do is to be alone. Wanting understanding of your pain that etches the scars in your life and on your person. Believe me as alone as you want to be you are far from it. A lot of people feel this way especially me and the only way I deal with it is with my writting. It is an escape from the razors and the burns that lie upon my body. Keep on writting and expressing these feelings, don't let them turn on you!
Dan, you are not alone mate. I call days like that "Black Dragon Days" as it feels like I'm carrying a huge big dragon around on my back. Good poem.
Dan, I came to the computer tonight feeling lonely and pretty worthless....then I read this poem and ...well Oh my god....you certainly are NOT alone. I understand exactly what you are saying. When I finished your poem my tears were flowing for the fact I felt the poem was me. You have a great gift for writing and I would love to read more. You grabbed my heart with your words....great job. Michelle
I took a look at your poetry as I noticed you were new to postpoems. This poem sums up how we are all ultimately 'alone' in this world. Even though we may be surrounded by people we are still alone in our thoughts and feelings. Nice one!
This is a wonderful poem! Write more, is all I can say!
Dan, Certainly I can relate to right now. Very well written. Hope to see more from you Malcolm.
i feel exactly the same.....it put me on the spot. you know just the right words to write. keep them coming, and let people know what's on your heart and mind.
Dan, Came across this and only have one question for you; Why are you not writing more poetry? Or if so, why aren't you posting more? this is an excellent poem, many people will relate to it. I did have a suggestion for one of the lines, you can use it or ignore it, I wont be offended.In the last line of the second stanza: "when people are around, I don't want them to stay" Just an idea for flow value. Terrific poem!! I would like to see more from you!