Feathered feet

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The winding of the clock

At the new Twilight Hour

Seeds time immaculate

And prophecy of a quiet mind,

Like saplings slowly striving

In chilled sucking quicksand

And absence of activity,

The nothingness of night.

But roots dearly cling

To Mother Earth's embrace

And the power that flowers

In our Crazy Cosmos.

Try to fix it, we are told.

But there's nothing to do.

How about you provide

Food as the soul-stuff in wind,

The sudden shock of electrical surges.

Fine, behold divine dancing hands

Erasing mistakes and

Performing playful prodigies.

The pencil brushes the paper

Conjuring the sweetest scenes,

Like the perfected swaying

Of a beautiful ballet

In which they gracefully greet me---

That is to say, we are met in space,

Unknowing but we are all the same---

Prancing on petite feathered feet.


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S74rw4rd's picture

The concept is both amazing

The concept is both amazing and delicately stated, which makes this a magnificent poem.


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Pungus's picture

Thanks Man

Perhaps you will be happy to know that it's been updated.


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S74rw4rd's picture

Bravo!  That is a more

Bravo!  That is a more intensely beautiful version.  Still reminds me, at certain lines, of the best of the French symbolists; but this version really excels!  The poem's center of gravity is "the sudden shock of electrical surges"; and, indeed, the lines proceed like successive electrical surges.  I applaud your talent as it is demonstrated in this poem.


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Thanks again

Not only for the compliments but also the crucial critique you gave me in order to make this poem better. You helped the suffering sequence immensely to become what it is now. Your comments never cease to please me. Thank you.


bananas are the perfect food

for prostitues

S74rw4rd's picture

Your response has made a

Your response has made a rather dreary day much better.  Thank you, sir.


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