You had some excellent inspiration and your offspring has all the resplendent craftsmanship of a classic love poem and all the allure of a drama.
Your innovative twist is your high-impact focus on invaded privacy, the "voyeur's curse", that intruded upon one of the most important firsts in a person's life, or, in your shrewd words, a "perfect abyss", an "inexperienced intensity". With impressive skill you conveyed the envy of the killjoys.
We're left wondering how beautiful the story would have ended if the young lovers had been left alone. And yes, as Starward noted, there is a strong undercurrent of Shakespearean tragedy.
A powerful angle on a timeless theme. Excellent, as always.
Thank you dear Patricia. Young love is hardly perfect and we all have had our start somewhere or other. I am grateful that you have astutely spotlighted such nuances and have read what a hurried perusal would have been so easily missed or ignored. And for all that and so much more I am most grateful.
My first impression of this poem was a sense of Shakespeare's adolescent lovers, Romeo & Juliet. Any poem that presents some aspect of them is, by that association, beautiful.
You had some excellent
You had some excellent inspiration and your offspring has all the resplendent craftsmanship of a classic love poem and all the allure of a drama.
Your innovative twist is your high-impact focus on invaded privacy, the "voyeur's curse", that intruded upon one of the most important firsts in a person's life, or, in your shrewd words, a "perfect abyss", an "inexperienced intensity". With impressive skill you conveyed the envy of the killjoys.
We're left wondering how beautiful the story would have ended if the young lovers had been left alone. And yes, as Starward noted, there is a strong undercurrent of Shakespearean tragedy.
A powerful angle on a timeless theme. Excellent, as always.
Thank you dear Patricia.
Thank you dear Patricia. Young love is hardly perfect and we all have had our start somewhere or other. I am grateful that you have astutely spotlighted such nuances and have read what a hurried perusal would have been so easily missed or ignored. And for all that and so much more I am most grateful.
here is poetry that doesn't always conform
galateus, arkayye, arqios,arquious, crypticbard, excalibard, wordweaver
My first impression of this
My first impression of this poem was a sense of Shakespeare's adolescent lovers, Romeo & Juliet. Any poem that presents some aspect of them is, by that association, beautiful.
Starward
Yes, that brings about an
Yes, that brings about an appreciated allusion ascribed by association. Thank you most kindly.
here is poetry that doesn't always conform
galateus, arkayye, arqios,arquious, crypticbard, excalibard, wordweaver
And thank you for posting the
And thank you for posting the poem.
Starward
I like it. very romantic and
I like it. very romantic and deep
Thanks kindly, had hardly
Thanks kindly, had hardly ever being referred to about being romantic in the past so this is really good to hear.
here is poetry that doesn't always conform
galateus, arkayye, arqios,arquious, crypticbard, excalibard, wordweaver