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Once Upon Series A message from you I received,
As my heart beat quickened, do my eyes deceive me?
I recall the first day I saw your face,
And I can't help but smile as I go back to that place.
It had begun as a beautiful day
Full of smiles, though the sky was turning grey.
The run began to pour and my hopes began to sink,
But you laughed and opened your umbrella.
As we ran for shelter I started to think.
This mysterious man with a beautiful smile
And eyes to match, could he be worthwhile?
A musician like me, he said he was.
And we braved the rain for the concert, though my hair began to fuzz.
We tore a garbage bag and spread it 'cross the ground,
And we sat down though my umbrella was nowhere to be found.
You opened yours as your shelter from the rain,
And scooted closer to me to share.
I tried to mask my blush with a glance away,
And somehow I felt like you cared.
I came back from this beautiful memory,
Back to what seems like a boring reality.
But then I read the message again,
"We should play music together sometime, friend."
I smiled and responded, "How about next weekend?"
Ok this is great. The only
Ok this is great. The only thing that i think you should change is on the second line. I think you should remove the word me from the end. But other than that it is great.
First of all, I simply love the title...........
that was what grabbed me and I feel titles are so important. Is like a really great cover to a book one hopes people will see and buy.... Hmmm a buy me book cover ere a read me poem title. Anyway, it works for me....... lovely poem. quite sweet, Smells like romance to me. I hope it was for you...... Keep reminiscing and sharing. Does wonders for the poet. Sincerely, Melissa Lundeen............