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Svetlana

Supremely written saga

Vested years from which we draw

Everchanging beauty even I

Tred soft 'ere it be withdrawn

Long lines of an angel seen

Around the bars towards a heavenly place

Nearer now, as I, so far

Am humbled by her tender grace!

Author's Notes/Comments: 

Ok. This s a first for me. I tried to make the last letter of each line say something, too. Not just the first. I cheated in the last line and used '!' lol

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©19 December 2001 - 11:06pm — cameca8
20 December 2001 - 11:06pm — gentle
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How can anything that is written for the love of a man / woman be wrong ? Beautiful dedication! Amy Riberdy

Gentle is the night♥

20 December 2001 - 11:06pm — Deborah Russell (not verified)
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good style...and a bit of difficulty in producing... i love it though and worked on one just today...thanks! gives the reader a little something extra...

20 December 2001 - 11:06pm — hawksquaw99
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awesome.... loved that way that you did the first letter and last letter saying something... nice touch to a wonderfully thought out poem... thank you for sharing this with us and glad that it was in the top 10.... made me smile... Renee'

20 December 2001 - 11:06pm — Rachelle Wiegand (not verified)
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A winner! I like it, Donald. Great Acrostic.

20 December 2001 - 11:06pm — J M (not verified)
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okay, I had to add this.......a winner indeed.and the ! fit in perfectly. ;-)

20 December 2001 - 11:06pm — J M (not verified)
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Donald, I thought it your absolute best!!! I shit you not!!! I loved it!!!