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Dreaming of Him
Here in bed
Dreaming of Him.
It is almost like
i can feel Him
Touch me.
His hand on my breast
His fingers entering me.
i moan out
As i feel His breath
On my cheek
Another finger enters me
His other hand moves
To my throat.
i orgasm again and again
As He continues to use me
Drenching my sheets.
Although very explicit, the detail in the poem does not offend, it seems very natural to be described exactly as you have done so. I would suggest only one alteration---in the next to the last line, get rid of the word "use" because that makes the speaker's lover look very selfish. The entire poem turns upon the speaker's pleasure being provided by her lover; the word "use" actually defeats the poem's overall purpose.
Starward