This one disturbed me. And, quite frankly, I was going to criticize it rather harshly. Then I figured out something. In these particular poems, perhaps you are saying more about the speaker's lover than the speaker herself. And this will be my reading strategy if I find others in your gallery like this one. It is not the speaker who is at fault for the infliction of pain; it is the inflictor. And in this, the poem is very successful, because you have demonstrated what he does to the speaker. You cast the aspersion, and rightly so, upon him.
This one disturbed me. And, quite frankly, I was going to criticize it rather harshly. Then I figured out something. In these particular poems, perhaps you are saying more about the speaker's lover than the speaker herself. And this will be my reading strategy if I find others in your gallery like this one. It is not the speaker who is at fault for the infliction of pain; it is the inflictor. And in this, the poem is very successful, because you have demonstrated what he does to the speaker. You cast the aspersion, and rightly so, upon him.
Starward