Marked

His teeth sink
Into my flesh
Just enough

To draw pain
Mixed with
Intense pleasure

He sucks and
He bites
Leaving His mark

i have been
Claimed as His
To be used

Marked
Where only
He can

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This one disturbed me. And, quite frankly, I was going to criticize it rather harshly. Then I figured out something. In these particular poems, perhaps you are saying more about the speaker's lover than the speaker herself. And this will be my reading strategy if I find others in your gallery like this one. It is not the speaker who is at fault for the infliction of pain; it is the inflictor. And in this, the poem is very successful, because you have demonstrated what he does to the speaker. You cast the aspersion, and rightly so, upon him.


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