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Fly Away (Rhyme)
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Rhymes I have you in my palms
My lovely little butterfly
Tickling me as you crawl
Then off away into the sky
You swim on dusty twilight
Flowing with tempered ease
I too dream of flight
And follow with silver wings
Watching a colored blur recede
Then disappear off to the Moon
Breath in a peaceful breeze
To awaken this memory soon
And freedom in the firmament
Where one glides to simply be,
Our timely meeting is heaven sent
I see why you flew to me
Fly away...
Nice piece
Very good piece. Love to read it. Check out the poem i created as well.
beautiful piece encapsulating a perfect moment...
An unexpected ending. It worked well. I found the flow very nice. Just two lines I think would provide better flow, the third stanza just leaving at 'awaken this memory', and fourth stanza 'our timely meet'. Anyway, always easy to play the 'couch critic'. lol. I do enjoy your work.
As I read this poem, I felt like it's about fate that leads you to a certain kind of person to meet, and when it's their time to go, they leave you all of a sudden. I really like this poem that you wrote called, "Fly Away". It's really good!! =)
I like this poem a lot. I do have a problem with it though. My problem is it wasn't in my mailbox for me to read. I'd like for you to send me poems as you post them. I'd like to read and comment as you add. Please, consider it for me. Thanks.