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Daddy I Miss You
I wake up to unfamiliar surroundings ,
your absence has changed everything ,
"Your not here daddy, your out of sight".
I long to hear the sound of your voice
I'm stuck with a photo of you and no choice
I lie awake in the middle of the night
It's nightmares struggling through this plight
The happy memories I try to fight
Suddenly I smell your presence
And my happiness is immense
But this blissful feeling is ripped away
Today is just like any other day
As I realize its only your crisp white shirt I'm holding tight.
A tear trickled down my cheek as I whispered "Goodnight"
I continue to strive for happiness
On my pursuit of ending this emptiness
Unknowingly I searched for fatherly qualities in other men
I look back to see how wreckless I was then
To them,I grew emotionally attached
And this feeling I never wanted to dispatch
A father figured is what I seeking
without you there's something missing
I'm constantly feelings inadequate even to this day
Love,Care,and Support was all you had to pay
But you never bothered to be hear
Not having you in
my life caused me to waver
I find myself veering. "I'm Lost"
Good
Great Poem
Nobonumb
there is a word missing in
there is a word missing in this line
:A father figured is what I seeking"
either as or was or something between the I and seeking
I a,so fidn that it throws off the flow of the poem when it ends in a single line while the rest rhymes but that is just me, it could end up being your style to do that
I like how you smell him as you go to sleep but then realize it is just his shirt you have in your hands, its a neat way of showing how our memory and brains get fuzzy when we sleep and how closely scent is linked to memory
Much Love
Ashley