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Time stands still,
as I touch your hair,
caress your skin,
and feel your heart
beating next to mine.
Only,
with each beat,
with every breath,
you drift further
from me, and
closer to
another.

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©2 November 2011 - 5:48am — Beavis
7 September 2012 - 7:58am — The_Mav
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Wow! This is a great write a

Wow! This is a great write a very unexpected ending! It certainly packs an unexpected punch!!! Great job!

If its possible, no matter what it always starts with a dream! 

10 September 2012 - 8:23am — Beavis
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Thanks!

Thanks!

27 August 2012 - 6:12pm — lovemesomejunk
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As I read this, my heart and

As I read this, my heart and mind went back 20+ years when my boys were babies. Oh how you love them and they are all yours. There whole exsitance depends on you, but as they grow you know that they will replace the love they have for you with someone else. I remember my oldest saying, "Mama, her hair is sooo soft" It is so bitter sweet to love. They will always be my babies. This may not be the way you meant for this to be taken, but it blessed me to think of that simple, unconditional love that I have for my boys.

28 August 2012 - 3:08pm — Beavis
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One of the great things about

One of the great things about poetry is that the writer has one thing in mind, but every reader brings their own thoughts and experiences to the poem, and when the two don't meet, but create something new, that's truly art ;-)

22 August 2012 - 5:05am — running_with_rabbits
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did you knwo this has 484

did you knwo this has 484 views?

beavis you are a demigod among-st postpoets

Much Love

Ashley

10 July 2012 - 7:25pm — running_with_rabbits
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I feel all hollow and hurt

I feel all hollow and hurt now my dear

HUGS

Much Love

Ashley

12 July 2012 - 2:23pm — Beavis
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That moment of realization is

That moment of realization is so beyond sucks! That's why they made tequila ;-)

12 July 2012 - 3:45pm — running_with_rabbits
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lol oh beavis I love you my

lol oh beavis I love you my dear! that is exactly why they made tequila

Much Love

Ashley

13 July 2012 - 6:32pm — Beavis
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Bottoms up!

Bottoms up!

7 July 2012 - 1:43am — disintegr8
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Simple; stunning

You say what you need to say with few words and much heart! I love it.

disintegr8

8 July 2012 - 5:47am — Beavis
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Thanks!

I try to distill my poems down to the fewest possible words but maximum impact. I think t worked here.

30 June 2012 - 2:04pm — ashes_theartofb...
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Relation.

Such a lugubrious ending.

I really love this poem.
Right now I can relate to it.
So it struck home with me.
Except my time doesn't stand still.
It's the passing of time that I fear the most.

This was a satisfying read to me.
A reminder.
Thank you for that.
=^.^=

"We are, Each of us angels with only one wing, and we can only fly by embracing one another." -Luciano De Crescenzo

30 June 2012 - 8:38pm — Beavis
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Thanks Ashes! I'm always

Thanks Ashes! I'm always pleased when one connects ;-)

23 June 2012 - 2:11am — 1rockerchic89
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I like this poem. It's really

I like this poem. It's really simple and bittersweet as another user stated. I should get off this site now.

25 June 2012 - 2:21pm — Beavis
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Thanks! But no! Don't go! I

Thanks! But no! Don't go! I haven't read your work yet!

16 June 2012 - 11:25pm — roxyanna77
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Ouch!

This hurts...

27 December 2011 - 3:07am — running_with_rabbits
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:)

I know how it feels tobe on both ends of this poem, and once again you have caprutred a feeling like a photograph made of words!

Much Love

Ashley

17 December 2011 - 5:57am — SSmoothie
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This reminds me how hard it

This reminds me how hard it is
Knowing is a terrible burden
Loving someone out of your life is never easy
thank you. You write stirringly the ghost of what you write stays with me.

Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."

8 November 2011 - 3:44am — Elfy
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Wow, that was good, but it

Wow, that was good, but it had a quick un expected twisting ending. It was wonderfull, and supriseing.
Beautifull yet so sad.

-Elfy*

6 November 2011 - 5:51am — raminastar
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wow

This piece in particular struck me. I enjoy the twist, the beginning in its closeness and the stab that just leaps out at you. I have a few of those myself. It really sucks when the reality is just as twisted.. the words are just so real.. I know these words.. these feelings.. quite well.. quite recent.. As Poppy stated.. you are a great addition to our little community! I look forward to reading more of your work! Thank you for sharing!

2 November 2011 - 2:14pm — missmfa
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Surprise ending!

Wow! I didn't see that ending coming! A good poem, short, to the point and surprising at the end. You might be interested to read my poem 3.3077 minutes ahead. It's also about time and how it can mess with relationships :-)

Check out my poetry book - as I write it! http://lostincyberspacepoems.blogspot.com

6 November 2012 - 6:02am — allets
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And Rum!

Vodka, whisky, more vodka, and more rum - T(KEY)La is good too, I suppose....but Benedictine and Brandy, Black Russians, and more rum is the stuff that mends the soul - Just joking, pass the south of the border brew with the worm in the bottom ~~ Lady A