moon's revenge

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i fell from the sky
the moon had her swift revenge
a tear at such bliss

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A response to "counting coup on the moon". A labored attempt at haiku

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Hollie Laurin's picture

wow, that is an amazing hiku. i think they are some of the hardest poems to write, it takes a lot of thought. i wonder though, how would that turn out as a full poem... you're works are always (or mostly.. i've yet to read them all) short, they leave me wanting more... you're a really good writer.. you've critiqued my friend's poem.. i was wondering if you could do the same to mine. no one actually does it.. you know what you're talking about. i love your works. they make me want to write far better than i ever will. keep up the good work.

S74rw4rd's picture

wow!


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