What if I told you...

What if I told you that this life you live isn't reality

It's only created because you have a strong mentality

It's not safe to try to wake up through an attempted brutality

But even through that, how could you ever know what is actuality?

What if I told you that everyone you see is only a projection

The desire to be real in a balanced world is such a strong connection

These images are changed by you pointing out their imperfections

And to this thought, all you can feel is objection.

What if I told you that all of your memories are self made

Much like the meals you think you've had, they're only homemade

You have never really been to a dance, never attended a masquerade

You never even had loved ones in the past, they were mentally portrayed.

What if I told you that there is no one you can truly believe

That finding the truth is the one thing you need to achieve

But the ability to root it out is what you will never receive

And even when you think you have a grasp, you have only misperceived.

Author's Notes/Comments: 

Put together this poem relatively quickly. It is different than what I usually write, just looking for any feedback. Thanks to anyone who replies, and even those who just take the time to read it!

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Stardust's picture

nice concept n poem, but i

nice concept n poem, but i agree wid d d previous comment. d rhymes feel somewhat... out of place, more emphasised than d poem itself. its as if u wrote the rhyming words first, then the poem :p

dont get me wrong though, i like the poem in itself very much :) it is d rhymes that r botherin me a bit :p

aRandomJoe's picture

Thank you for the feedback

Thank you for the feedback stardust, I have actually read a couple of your poems and appreciate this comment from a creative poet like yourself. This poem was created close to how you described with the words created first, and it was different because usually I just let full composures flow out at one time instead of creating so many almost separate lines. I am glad to hear that the forced rhyming seems to be the big problem though, that is reassuring towards what else I could stir up!