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Failure
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journey struggle, struggle
that was on my mind
can do it , break it through
cross every line
i did what i said
i tried my best
followed by bad luck
in every step
don't believe in it
but face , face everytime
reality of hard work
not work everytime
failure , failure whenever i reach
wanted to go back
will then can i succeed?
i know what i did
had a chance,
tried to give best shot
miss everytime
thought, should give up
too tired to make another defeated shot
run, run , run away from bad luck of mine
wait, calm let it hit directly this time
try , try again
even if this failure make a big line..........
Nice motivational piece. I
Nice motivational piece. I think to emphasize some more on certain words. For example "thought. should give up" would have much more meaning if it was displayed:
"thought
should give up"
A single word on a line brings focus/emphasis to that word more than a comma.
thank you ^^ i'll keep that
thank you ^^ i'll keep that in mind
Puncuation Absence
is stylistic and a puzzle for mixed meanings to unravel. The near rhymes vanish which is kinda nice and non-interfering. Perseverance? I like that - sassy!
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