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Promise Land

Trembling fingers
Pulsing Heart
A stench that lingers
from end to start

Alive but not awake
bloodshot eyes
smiling for his sake
Til sunset rise

Slashing at her wrists
Faltering sight
Til she cease to exist
darkness and light

Witness his death
knife in hand
He was all she had left
From the Promise Land

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This is one of those poems that i scribble down in a hurry so i dont forget it. This poem came like an epiphany , like a breeze that whispers in my ear, its only the matter of remembering it that i cant do :)

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last updated 11 January 2012 - 8:20am
©10 January 2012 - 9:19am — alivebutunawake
10 January 2012 - 11:49am — facethetruth2b
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so far I like all of your

so far I like all of your writes, we do have a similarity in writting . I have the same problem if I do not write it as I think it it is lost forever in my head somewhere . Keep up the writting . I see you are from Australia I have a friend that moved their . Always wanted to visit their . Read my poem the day I tried and let me know your thoughts . It is long kinda very long but Thanks in advance....

you laugh at me because I am differant, I laugh at you because You are all the same ...(KoRn) J.D......

10 January 2012 - 1:50pm — alivebutunawake
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Same goes to you

Same goes to you , i love how you are truthful about yourself and can express through poetry , while me on the other hand im more like im acting a character then soley myself.. i can never seem to find myself when writing because i get so absorbed in poetry that i lose who i really am.. well thats the beauty of it :) ahaha yeah im from australia , but i was actually born in New Zealand and where abouts is your friend in Aussie? :) OMG ! i read your poem the day i tried , i could never have the courage to write post something so personal , all my personal poems stay in my journal for my eyes only :) It takes a strong person to write that much :) I liked it very much and keep up with POETRY ! :) p.s. i always wanted to visit the U.S :)

im just a teenager but ive been writing poetry since i started primary school , so its more of a talent than a subject to me. Other than that i love art and sport! My last year in school and hoping to travel to Japan because i always dreamt to :3 ( hopef