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Make Me Feel
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Poems make me feel
don't make me reason
stain me with things that
bleach my skin as white as bone
lead me down and drown me in the empty sea
eat away at everything real, break my heart
with things devoid of meaning and lacking essence
keep me from the world; filth on the pavement, death in the air, blood in the gutter, cuts on my hands
hide me, guard me, bind me, blind me
drown me in that warm embrace
that chokes life from my soul
and leaves me hollow
make me feel
make me feel
definitely expressive. something we have all felt at some time. the love, the pain... wanting it back maybe.
a bit sad:(
This is a wonderful piece of work. Holds many different emotions for each reader. A good range of emotions expressed. Im impressed lol.
Nikki x
Hi dan, yet again a wonderfully written piece. Im now on here its venus venus N. I have 3 poems up. Only short ones mind you lol.
It was beautiful...your words were chosen well and..daniel i'm not so good at critiques, I'm more of a scientist than a poet but it was touching. Thank you for sharing it!
Fine, I'll comment, but just because you make me.
I'd appreciate it if no one reads this comment but Dan, however I can't stop you, so go ahead.
Dan, I think you've done very well with this poem, and though I have no idea what personal reasons you had that made you write it, or what you wrote it about, it reminds me of my fear, and to me this poem will always be about fear.
There I said it! Now leave me alone!
Daniel, Daniel, Daniel... another chicky babe you got wrapped around your little finger... i like the poem, i like it alot, i would love to be able to say it came from inside of me because when i read it, i felt it. So if i can rightly guess what its about i can marry you huh?... welllll, i think its about a culmination of things, but im not sure how much youve told other people or if im dillusional in thinking you may have told me more than others... its a mixture of all the stuff you went through as a child, the trauma, the accident, the fear and abuse, and all the darkness that has invaded your light as an adult. for example "j", i think she made you feel how you describe in the poem.. 'bind me, blind me'...its about being numb, pushing away the very thing you cry out for...
Hmm... I'd like to know who or what you're talking to. I agree this could be a cry from depression, or a wail of romance. Some of the wording brings the reader back to the mechanics of the writing; I had to read sentences more than twice to "get" it.
wow daniel..i really like it. it flows really nicely i think. and the structure of the poem on the page is good as well i think. i think it seems to identify with the feeling that we all have of wanting something still even after it has ripped us apart...shows the feelings of us all as gluttons for emotional punishment..the speaker in the poem seems to want to run away but finds his or her feet stuck in the sand...hmm. very good!
Though it is quite depressing.. the one who makes you feel is a most interesting person, and I would think that the one that you would love. Depending on the way that you read the poem... it may be depressing, but it also may be very romantic and it is full of emotions. I LOVE IT! *snap snap*
Thought provoking. The author seems to yearn for shelter and struggles to overcome numbness...
Very expressive, and I can relate to the authors words. An ache simplified into a well written poem. PEB 3/28/05
It's as though you want to be unmasked and left feeling vulnerable, yet protected and in fear. It's like heart break....you gave yourself up for that and when it's sucked the life out of you, you're empty inside. Almost as though you don't see where it's going until you reflect back upon it.
I really like it. You have talent! And I suck at critiques. :-o
I really like it. It's so sad, but it's so true. Love can be alot like that sometimes. You love someone so much it hurts, and you can't help but love them.... its all so crazy too... either way its totally awesome. Even how it makes a diamond is cool!
~Niky
Wow...such raw emotion and feeling. Definitely left an impression on me. This poem did not have a depressing sort of effect on me, although I can understand how someone could interpret it that way, and even how it potentially may have been written with that feeling in mind. The feeling I got while reading the poem was more of...not a heart wrenching sort of thing, but something that so fills you with compassion for the speaker....hard to explain. Splendid job.