all her candles

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Hyacinth garden

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

the rain slowly drips down

 

down glass, steel and stone

 

in the big heartless city

 

neon tinted shadows send cryptic

 

messages
although a masquerade is read

 

read by her own lips alone

 

 

 

presume all pleasure

 

is in a ritual called deception

 

a lie the hallowed have concealed

 

behind a mask that she wears

 

she smiles hiding

 

hiding the tears

 

 

 

they taste of salty desire

 

perfect in position

 

sliding down

 

dripping down

 

as if written in flagrant text

 

asking mysterious questions
that chafe within the indescribable words

 

 

 

grey persists all day and into the long night

 

dreams develop in syllables

 

until, love disappears

 

love is without light

 

 

 

now taut anxiety

 

escapes over the walls of abandon

 

in her lonely imagination she travels home

 

as she beds emptiness

 

where all her candles extinguish

 

 

 

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eternitywhispers's picture

This is woahhhh. Powerful,

This is woahhhh. Powerful, strong and intense. I love the last line, it gives that final blow to the whole picture. I couldn't visualize the poem because it just isin't supposed to be visualized, it's supposed to be felt. no pictures, just feelings and instincts. your flow is absolutely mind-captivating. this has blown me away, and i think i'll keep coming back to this poem because its beyond my capability to understand such a masterpiece.

nightlight1220's picture

Totally beautiful imagery of

Totally beautiful imagery of the proverbial "calamity jane" type woman. The "damsel in distress", the epitome of what every wannabe "hero" has a keen eye for. The "temptation of a man's ego to dominate over".... love the sly coo of your words...as I always do.. *smile*  

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...and he asked her, "do you write poetry? Because I feel as if I am the ink that flows from your quill."

"No", she replied, "but I have experienced it. "

 

bishu's picture

Someday I hope to visit your Hyacinth Garden Respected Mr 9inety

Someday I hope to visit your Hyacinth Garden Respected Mr 9inety.Maybe in 2031.Your posts are becoming more n more interesting.But somehow I expect some Big Bang from you since your mastery of words,language is excellent(my humble view) Your moony writes are indeed enticing.Merry Chrissy Sir from a visitor from a bog.


©bishu 

 

Poetic_Eyes's picture

hi

hi. i liked yoiur poem. it had emotion, images, and you expressed your talent as a writer. 

a.griffiths57's picture

    Powerful poetry evoking

 

 

Powerful poetry evoking strong images. Love this poem. The poem is a good read and well and pointedly written; love your choice of words and descriptive quality.


 

 

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allets's picture

Surreal elements caused me to

Surreal elements caused me to drift into the half-dream state reading this poem. Enjoyed tremendously. Your work has evolved so much. It is rich and image full, with new connections and different ways of seeing. Nice ~Lady A